1. Posted: July 4, 2018In:

    When his son demonstrates prodigious Connect 4 skills, a father who was always second-best reconnects with his hyper-competitive family to train the boy and regain the title he lost from their fierce rival family in the quadrennial competition

    TullyArcher Samurai

    How old is the son? Because if he's too young, this is just cruel, and I wouldn't be able to get behind the father character. Something to watch out for.

    How old is the son? Because if he’s too young, this is just cruel, and I wouldn’t be able to get behind the father character. Something to watch out for.

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  2. Posted: July 1, 2018In:

    Is this good for a first logline

    TullyArcher Samurai

    It sounds like it's going to be one of those films with tons of close up slowmo on his face as he contemplates. What you're describing all takes place in his head. Is that what you're going for? If not, think of how you could make this visual (film) instead of interior (novel).

    It sounds like it’s going to be one of those films with tons of close up slowmo on his face as he contemplates. What you’re describing all takes place in his head. Is that what you’re going for? If not, think of how you could make this visual (film) instead of interior (novel).

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  3. Posted: June 29, 2018In:

    When his reflection changes to a young woman who needs his help, a reclusive author must enter Miraland and lead the rebellion against the crooked regime before the corruption spills into the real world.

    TullyArcher Samurai

    The stakes feel just a bit underwhelming to me... we've already got plenty of corruption on our own. Will there be, like, monsters and stuff that will get through? Things that are... I dunno, scarier?

    The stakes feel just a bit underwhelming to me… we’ve already got plenty of corruption on our own. Will there be, like, monsters and stuff that will get through? Things that are… I dunno, scarier?

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