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After a lovesick flight attendant and the wife of a doppelganger of a famous actor becomes pregnant by him, he sets out to convince them to share a home with him.
I'm a little confused - is it a triangle between two pregnant women and one man who looks like a famous actor? Interesting! (If I've got it right, of course). The doppelganger characteristic seems to imply that he may be shallow, relying on his looks and its similarity to someone famous to live theRead more
I’m a little confused – is it a triangle between two pregnant women and one man who looks like a famous actor?
Interesting! (If I’ve got it right, of course). The doppelganger characteristic seems to imply that he may be shallow, relying on his looks and its similarity to someone famous to live the high life without actually earning anything. In which case, a good flaw – and one he would need to overcome if he is to make things right with the two women he loves.
Can I suggest:
“A man who coasts through life by virtue of looking exactly like a famous actor impregnates both his wife and his girlfriend at the same time, and sets out to convince them to share a home together”
See lessMARBLE HILL SKINNIES AND THE BLACKJACK KID: The story of 2 young men addict to drugs, sex and gambling. They decide the best treatment is to go to Vegas and over indulge the disease.
There are some unnecessary words in there (e.g. "The story of") and you are missing the event that sets them in motion. Some stakes could be useful as well. Here is a quick rework: "2 young men who are addicted to drugs, sex and gambling need to get clean if they are to attend their sisters wedding,Read more
There are some unnecessary words in there (e.g. “The story of”) and you are missing the event that sets them in motion. Some stakes could be useful as well. Here is a quick rework:
“2 young men who are addicted to drugs, sex and gambling need to get clean if they are to attend their sisters wedding, so they go to Vegas to get it all out of their system, but as they get deeper into their worst natures they realise they might never return”
FLAWED PROTAGONISTS: 2 young men who are addicted to drugs, sex and gambling
EXPERIENCE EVENT: e.g. hit rock bottom when a third friend overdoses; or, want to get clean in time for their friends wedding…etc.
ACTION: and decide to try stimulation satiation therapy in Vegas (this is the technical name for overindulging in order to get it out of your system)
ANTAGONIST: ?? their vices? I think a lack of other things in life to pull them back is best, but if this could be represented by a person? i.e. one of the two young men could want to get clean, but the other one has already entirely given up on life and risks pulling them both down.
STAKES/TIME CLOCK: ?? the wedding scenario gives you clear stakes and time pressure, but there are a million ways to do this
Keep at it!
See lessWhen his memories of his late family are erased by the corrupt head of a tech company, a memory forger must use his skills to extract intel from a rival firm’s lead scientist to get them back.
Cool idea - don't think the extra detail is necessary in the logline, but its definitely a strong element within the world of the film. Could maybe use a timeclock? E.g. memories can only be restored if retrieved in a particular amount of time? Also, what are the challenges that get in the way?
Cool idea – don’t think the extra detail is necessary in the logline, but its definitely a strong element within the world of the film. Could maybe use a timeclock? E.g. memories can only be restored if retrieved in a particular amount of time? Also, what are the challenges that get in the way?
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