1. Posted: April 3, 2017In:

    When her male colleagues wager on her best friend’s chastity, a woman remains silent; when the bet ends in rape, she seeks redemption through vengeance.

    yqwertz Mentor

    Here is a logline with a more specific do: A woman seeks justice for her friend who commits suicide after being raped; when the billionaire goes scot-free, she seeks to drive him suicidally insane. (25 words)

    Here is a logline with a more specific do:

    A woman seeks justice for her friend who commits suicide after being raped; when the billionaire goes scot-free, she seeks to drive him suicidally insane.     (25 words)

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  2. Posted: April 3, 2017In:

    When her male colleagues wager on her best friend’s chastity, a woman remains silent; when the bet ends in rape, she seeks redemption through vengeance.

    yqwertz Mentor

    OK, if I downplay the redemption angle and accept that the bet is not the inciting incident and extend the hook farther into the story, I have: When a women commits suicide after being raped, her best friend wants the billionaire locked up; when he gets off scot-free, she wants him dead.

    OK, if I downplay the redemption angle and accept that the bet is not the inciting incident and extend the hook farther into the story, I have:

    When a women commits suicide after being raped, her best friend wants the billionaire locked up; when he gets off scot-free, she wants him dead.

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  3. Posted: April 3, 2017In:

    When her male colleagues wager on her best friend’s chastity, a woman remains silent; when the bet ends in rape, she seeks redemption through vengeance.

    yqwertz Mentor

    Thanks for your comments. I understand your position. Until now, I understood that the hook in the logline got you just to the end of the first act. (At that point my heroine has decided what she must do, but she does not figure out the how until the end of the second act.) What you all seem to be sRead more

    Thanks for your comments. I understand your position. Until now, I understood that the hook in the logline got you just to the end of the first act. (At that point my heroine has decided what she must do, but she does not figure out the how until the end of the second act.)

    What you all seem to be saying is that the logline take us as far into the film as necessary until we come to a unique hook. Is that a fair summary?

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