A shy adolescent is forced to question her identity when she and a mysterious new friend are chased across the states by a vengeful Police Officer.

by evad97 · Initiate · 40 pts 227 views

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Richiev · Oracle · 58,825 pts

What is the vengeful police officer, seeking vengeance for? Does the lead character know why the police officer wants vengeance?

Former member · 114,968 pts

Yqwertz is correct on the technical point of the officer's jurisdictional boundary.

Also, why is the adolescents ID in question as a result of being chased by law enforcement?? I can guess what the problem with her ID is, but a logline shouldn't leave me guessing on an important element in the plot.

"Also forced to question"? is not an specific objective goal.? It's a plot problem.? What is her objective goal?? What must? she because she's being pursued over something about her identity?? Check out the guidelines under "Our Formula" for how to build an industry standard logline.

dogger · Oracle · 88,020 pts

Yqwertz is correct on the technical point of the officer's jurisdictional boundary.

Also, why is the adolescents ID in question as a result of being chased by law enforcement?? I can guess what the problem with her ID is, but a logline shouldn't leave me guessing on an important element in the plot.

"Also forced to question"? is not an specific objective goal.? It's a plot problem.? What is her objective goal?? What must? she because she's being pursued over something about her identity?? Check out the guidelines under "Our Formula" for how to build an industry standard logline.

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