Ordinary carpenter leads a community in building a new village on an unowned beach in 1820’s England. When the establishment refuses to hear their claim, they declare themselves part of the USA. (Based on true events.)

Like the idea. It seems a bit long and wordy. I find myself being confused rather than curious what their "claim" is. Also the opening is a statement, rather than the beginning of a story. Perhaps lead with "When an ordinary carpenter leads the building of a new village..."

Like the idea. It seems a bit long and wordy. I find myself being confused rather than curious what their "claim" is. Also the opening is a statement, rather than the beginning of a story. Perhaps lead with "When an ordinary carpenter leads the building of a new village..."