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Good start using "When"; No need for protag name unless famous; "drafted by a mysterious woman" doesn't show much enough conflict. Try explaining up front about the reason why he has to fight (it invilves seeing his wife again, but why?). Also, the Spetsnaz. Cool word, but no one knows what it is.
What's spetsnaz? A bottled water company?
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