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NavCRPenpusher
Posted: August 7, 20222022-08-07T12:53:37+10:00 2022-08-07T12:53:37+10:00In: Adventure

A reckless guy with a secret smartphone app must go back in time and undo his courtship with his cousin when he accidentally impregnates her.

Hi, logline it community.

Yesterday I dreamed about it, and it left me a little awkward. I know this logline is quite lol, but it sounds like a very interesting story and wanted to share it with you.

I don’t have much of the story, just that the young boy used to be very lonely but mischievous and after meeting his cousin he fell in love with her and proceeded to get her pregnant. Repentant, with the help of a secret application on his phone, he traveled to the past to replace himself by performing the same events in a less provocative way so that she would not feel offended or attracted.

By the way, he can only travel to events that have occurred while he was carrying that phone. And since during that relationship he used to change his phone very often, every time he traveled to the past, he had to find his previous phone to continue traveling further into the past.

Hope you find it interesting too, and help me to find my mistakes, please.

Greetings.

NavCR

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    1. Odie Samurai
      2022-08-09T08:08:26+10:00Added an answer on August 9, 2022 at 8:08 am

      Another angle:
      “A techie teen creates a time-traveling smartphone app in order to right wrongs when accidentally impregnating his kissing cousin.”

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    2. BenGilani Logliner
      2022-08-08T15:38:12+10:00Added an answer on August 8, 2022 at 3:38 pm

      Hi NavCR,

      Reading your proposed logline and the short synopsis you provided, I see something like this:

      A mischievous lonely guy must use a mysterious app on his cell phone to go back in time and undo the events that resulted in him impregnating his cousin.

      I hope you this helps

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      • NavCR Penpusher
        2022-08-11T12:10:05+10:00Replied to answer on August 11, 2022 at 12:10 pm

        Thank you Ben and Odie. I hope my skills are improving.

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        • BenGilani Logliner
          2022-08-11T14:33:06+10:00Replied to answer on August 11, 2022 at 2:33 pm

          Hi NavCR,
          Of course, they certainly are. I suggest you read the loglines of movies in different genres. I did it myself and trust me, it helps.

          Good Luck

          Ben

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