A high school age boy comes to suspects his father is responsible for a recent series of grisly prostitute killings. Together with a plucky young call girl, he?teams up working to find the truth and stop further killings.

Seems better, what do you think?

I can see this as a Goonies-type story where the kids are sick of the adults telling them what to do and the police are useless. If you are going for this idea, i'd take out the prostitute murders and just say he is a "murderer". Also, maybe a better inciting incident would be;

An?adventurous?boy sets out to clear his father's name when he is suspected of?committing?a series of recent murders.

This gives him a clear and personal goal. Hope it helps.

I can see this as a Goonies-type story where the kids are sick of the adults telling them what to do and the police are useless. If you are going for this idea, i'd take out the prostitute murders and just say he is a "murderer". Also, maybe a better inciting incident would be;

An?adventurous?boy sets out to clear his father's name when he is suspected of?committing?a series of recent murders.

This gives him a clear and personal goal. Hope it helps.