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Posted: September 3, 20162016-09-03T09:26:53+10:00 2016-09-03T09:26:53+10:00In: Thriller

An outcast teenager teams up with his high school bully to take down the spirit of Al Capone, who has possessed a small Indiana town to rebuild his empire.

An outcast teenager teams up with his high school bully to take down the spirit of Al Capone, who has possessed a small Indiana town to rebuild his empire.
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    1. [Deleted User]
      2016-09-03T18:15:33+10:00Added an answer on September 3, 2016 at 6:15 pm

      Still, why does he have to team up with the bully? Why is he outcast? He’s possessed the whole town? And what is the inciting incident — it should be first in your logline. Hope this helps.

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    2. Neer Shelter Singularity
      2016-09-04T17:00:02+10:00Added an answer on September 4, 2016 at 5:00 pm

      All comments made to the previous draft of this logline still apply.

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    3. dpg Singularity
      2016-09-04T23:19:26+10:00Added an answer on September 4, 2016 at 11:19 pm

      As the others have said. ?The math just doesn’t add up in this logline.

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