A terminally ill girl stops taking her medication to end her suffering, only to feel better discovering she is a victim of her mother’s munchausen by proxy

Now that a?formerly sick high school star?athlete realizes?it was her own?morbidly obese mother who's been ?poisoning her for attention, she must do everything she can to protect her baby sister.

CraigDGriffiths:

I think this has the makings for a compelling psychological drama. ?Alas, it is also presents challenges to summarizing in a logline. ?How I might formulate a logline depends on what is conceived to be the inciting incident.

One option is that after suffering for years with a painful, mysterious illness (setup), the doctor tells the girl it's hopeless, she will never recover, probably die an early death (Inciting Incident). Her End of Act 1 Decision is to put herself out of her misery, stop taking the medication, die sooner rather than later. ? Early Act 2: ?and then contrary to her expectation, she gets better, ?completely recovers.

Another option is to open with an Inciting Incident where ?she refuses to take her medication because she's tired of suffering, wants to put herself out of her misery. ?Through the rest of Act 1 she wavers as arguments and tests of will ensue, but her End of Act One Decision is to adamantly refuse to take medication; no one can make her change her mind. ?Early Act 2: ?contrary to her expectation, she gets better, completely recovers.

Either way, I would not have her quit because she suspects she's being deliberately poisoned. ?That should be the mid or late Act 2 Big Reveal , ?the shocking truth she discovers after she's in complete remission.

What do you conceive as being the inciting incident?

CraigDGriffiths:

I think this has the makings for a compelling psychological drama. ?Alas, it is also presents challenges to summarizing in a logline. ?How I might formulate a logline depends on what is conceived to be the inciting incident.

One option is that after suffering for years with a painful, mysterious illness (setup), the doctor tells the girl it's hopeless, she will never recover, probably die an early death (Inciting Incident). Her End of Act 1 Decision is to put herself out of her misery, stop taking the medication, die sooner rather than later. ? Early Act 2: ?and then contrary to her expectation, she gets better, ?completely recovers.

Another option is to open with an Inciting Incident where ?she refuses to take her medication because she's tired of suffering, wants to put herself out of her misery. ?Through the rest of Act 1 she wavers as arguments and tests of will ensue, but her End of Act One Decision is to adamantly refuse to take medication; no one can make her change her mind. ?Early Act 2: ?contrary to her expectation, she gets better, completely recovers.

Either way, I would not have her quit because she suspects she's being deliberately poisoned. ?That should be the mid or late Act 2 Big Reveal , ?the shocking truth she discovers after she's in complete remission.

What do you conceive as being the inciting incident?