After a robber kills his mother new years eve, a depressed scientist tries to convince his country that the only way to make the world a safer place for all would be to get rid of money.

Nocturnedk:

As Nir Shelter said.

I've said my piece on the substance of your story. ? I remain dubious, but if it sells , I will be happy to be the 1st one to offer congratulations.

Best wishes.

Nocturnedk:

As Nir Shelter said.

I've said my piece on the substance of your story. ? I remain dubious, but if it sells , I will be happy to be the 1st one to offer congratulations.

Best wishes.

Considering the latest draft of the logline in your response to DPG, there are a few logic flaws that can't be ignored.

Even if all they do is establish a new political party and not run for the big job, they won't be able to bring about the momentous change your original logline stated.? However, if they do run for the presidency, even with 2 Billion dollars and droves of devoted fans Hillary still lost the election - how can these 2 penniless nobodies win?? It simply makes little sense.

Lastly, you didn't specify in the last draft of the logline what their dream is, you need to state a clear goal - what is it that the MC must achieve?