That psychedelic drug would be developed by the person who cooked it getting to the highest purity range In the planet,in/on each individual will be processed differently and this is what alarms the person because it’d mean the reality on this world that the consumer is expiriencing COULD change.An entity would change it,anentity that uses the connection that occurs when the receptors in the brain receive the substance molecule(which can be related to all psychedelic drugs known to mankind including “the god’s molecule”) as it’s path to communicate with the person(man or woman). thriller/enhancer/ introspective/suspense (don’t think about stealing it or filtering it…this entity will know…I AM THE OWNER).
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That psychedelic drug would be developed by the person who cooked it getting to the highest purity range In the planet,in/on each individual will be processed differently and this is what alarms the person because it’d mean the reality on this world that the consumer is expiriencing COULD change.An entity would change it,anentity that uses the connection that occurs when the receptors in the brain receive the substance molecule(which can be related to all psychedelic drugs known to mankind including “the god’s molecule”) as it’s path to communicate with the person(man or woman). thriller/enhancer/ introspective/suspense (don’t think about stealing it or filtering it…this entity will know…I AM THE OWNER).
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Yunsa:
This doesn’t seem to be a synopsis, and it definitely isn’t a logline. In 109 words the post doesn’t establish a protagonist, an antagonist, or any sort of plot. This post uses story-specific elements that make no sense out of context and I can’t make much sense out of it.
I thought this concept was familiar and it turns out you’ve posted this concept before. ?The first attempt was better than this, but still needed a polish. There are five different reviews on that post and you don’t seem to have studied any of the feedback given to you in an attempt to make a better logline. So, please review the Formula tab at the top of the page, read through the feedback you’ve already received, and look through other people’s loglines and the feedback they’ve received and try to gain a better understanding of forming a logline. An even better way to learn to understand a logline is to post reviews on other people’s, try to decide and understand what works and doesn’t in their loglines.
In other words, please try your best to create a logline for your concept that is as close to the standard format so the other members can be as efficient and effective as possible in helping you revise it. If nothing else just describe the protagonist and the objective goal they pursue.
I think this was posted by mistake as a new logline.
Yunsa,
Was this intended as a response to a post on a previous thread?
If so, let me know and I’ll delete this so you can post on the original thread.
I’m not sure if this is for a script or just spam from a pharmaceutical company trying to sell cheap drugs.
Yunsa,
Comparing what you wrote to just about all of the other examples on this page should at least set off an alarm that you’re doing something really wrong as it pertains to loglines. Most just miss the story beats, you missed the entire drum.