Penpusher
Posted: 2017-09-15T14:22:40+10:00 In:

famous voodoo queen reincarnated with no recollection of who or what she is capable of. Her past lives assist her in discovering her true identity.

famous voodoo queen reincarnated with no recollection of who or what she is capable of. Her past lives assist her in discovering her true identity.
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    1. Singularity

      The first sentence lacks a preposition and makes little sense as a result, it also seems to be the first clause of a longer sentence.

      I think you meant:
      After a famous Voodoo queen is reincarnated, with no recollection of who or what she is, her past lives assist her in discovering her true identity.

      You allude to the fact that her goal is to discover her true identity, but I’m not sure that is made clear enough. Is she aware of the fact that she doesn’t know who she really is? Or is she under the impression that she is someone else, in other words, does she have a fake identity and fake memories?

      Either way, the stakes are unclear. What is the worst thing that will happen should she not find out her true identity? At the same time, what’s the best thing that would happen should she find it out?

      Lastly, and this is a small thing, I’m not sure what a voodoo queen is. What powers does being a voodoo queen give her?

      There is also a logic flaw in the premise. After she is reincarnated, she becomes someone else and no longer the voodoo queen. Why must she remember who she was in a previous life?

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    2. Penpusher

      i think by you not understanding what a voodoo queen is or the actual religion, “vodou”, makes this conversation between you and I, a little more complicated. you stated twice about the first sentence, just used different wording each time. Some of the questions you are asking are making yourself confused. you also have to understand what exactly reincarnation/past lives actually mean. but ok?let me go study a little bit more and come back and try this again.?Thanks?Nir.

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    3. Singularity

      As Nir Shelter said.

      And what dramatic difference does it make if she discovers her past/true identity? Why MUST she know this? ?What dramatic problem MUST she solve with this knowledge?

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    4. Singularity

      It would help if there was an antagonist. A reason why she ‘must’ discover who she is or else (This bad thing will happen)

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