When a young successful fashion model suffering from neglect and heartbreak from her lover. She seeks love and comfort from his arch rival for revenge.
KeeksboutitPenpusher
When a young successful fashion model suffering from neglect and heartbreak from her lover. She seeks love and comfort from his arch rival for revenge.
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Keeks,
These are incomplete sentences as is.
A? hearbroken woman hooks up with her ex’s rival to seek revenge, but later learns…
I hope you have an ironic arc awaiting this woman down the road or she realizes how to become a better person in the end.
Can you provide more info about the plot?
This might be a story arc for a character in an episode or two or three of an ensemble soap opera or dramatic series set in the bling, bling world of fashion, but I don’t see how it is substantial enough to justify the investment of time, money and talent to be a feature film.
It sounds like there are many melodramatic moments in this story and very low stakes. She wants a better man and finds it, then her first man finds out and gets angry. Up until this point in the story nothing is out of the ordinary, or in other words, no inciting incident has occurred.
The first man threatens the new man’s life – could be seen as an inciting incident. She must now take action to stop him from killing her new love – this is act 2. For an MC’s action this is too slim (pardon the pun…) there simply isn’t enough, in her trying to stop him, to make a whole act 2 of a film.
If she fails, the first man kills the new one, she’s left alone and I’m not sure what the point of the film was. If she succeeds, she lives happily ever after with the new man – a pedestrian outcome at best. There’s no ‘hook’, twist or anything that makes this a story worthy problem for a film.