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Hi Leon
This draft of the lognline is shorter but reads the same as the previous version. The MC, her position in society, her flaw, the inciting incident, the antagonist and her goals remain the same.
Previous comments have outlined a problem with your inciting incident and the MC goals.
Maybe try experimenting with new character descriptions and different inciting incidents.
For example, according to the current draft of the logline, I think the inciting incident is the plain crash. This implies that her normal "day to day" life, before the story starts, is being a prisoner and a sudden opportunity to break for freedom changed that.
What if her normal "day to day" life was being a lawyer and being arrested or framed is what changed that? This strait away implies she needs to fight a corrupt detective or evil ex husband to prove her innocence. This also gives her a clear and decisive goal, it even gives you an obligatory scene at the end both without needing specification in the logline.
When her prison plane crashes, a lawyer wrongfully arrested for fraud, must evade the FBI long enough to eliminate the vicious husband who framed her and prove her innocence.
I like how you are making progress on this, guys!
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