possible rites of passage “the masterpiece”

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“The relations between two radically different filmmakers takes a u-turn upon discovering one’s been the secret critic to the other’s ongoing masterpiece-MOST PERSONAL TO HIM”

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I plan to title the film, same as the masterpiece in question, for which they have upside-down film philosophies, which thus leads to a tense relationship

(maybe gradually his own editor takes side with the critic in a subtle way)

but then he just makes it regardless
and begins to agree too

..both end up learning so much from each other, they just sip their coffee in silence and we know life goes on

(There should be a strong reason why he is adamant to make the self destructive film, which eventually sinks.
What makes it so personal)

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dogger · Oracle · 88,020 pts ★ Accepted

>>>would be him making his film regardless
Then something like that (more clearly defined) should be in the logline.

However,
>>>discovering the painful truth, that he lived a life full of lies..
should not be in the logline. Because : 1] It's a spoiler, giving away a critical beat of how the story ends. 2] Loglines are about what a protagonist intentionally sets out to do, not what he unintentionally discovers.? And 3] the come-to-realize/discovery pertains to a subjective issue. Although subjective issues are entailed in the pursuit of an objective goal, loglines focus on? objective issues, not subjective ones.

fwiw

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I concur with Nir Shelter on the issue of significant stakes that would emotionally invest an audience in the outcome.

Also:
>>>this is a Hollywood insider story and most producers hate/avoid reading these kinds of scripts.

Particularly from outsiders.? It takes an insider to know what it's like to be an insider.

dogger · Oracle · 88,020 pts

I concur with Nir Shelter on the issue of significant stakes that would emotionally invest an audience in the outcome.

Also:
>>>this is a Hollywood insider story and most producers hate/avoid reading these kinds of scripts.

Particularly from outsiders.? It takes an insider to know what it's like to be an insider.

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