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You're right, her own sense of virtue is still there, her moral reputation is questionable due to her work already so perhaps she is?just trying to restore freedom.Ill-fated was a reference to her existing luck. i.e her unnecessary arrest.What she…

thank you both for the input on this. I'm gonna put it on the shelf until I can delve a little deeper into the concept.

Would it work better to just knock off the first sentence? 'A simple robbery turns problematic for a cash-hungry escort driver who soon realizes his dark and sinful connection to the victim'

I would probably lean toward my second entry in the last post, however, change 'recognizes' for 'soon realizes'

apologies, I was using the word obscured in the wrong context. My intention with it was to show that the robbery had become problematic, the wrong choice of word. "After a cash-hungry escort driver assembles a team of amateurs for…

When a cash-hungry escort driver gets wind of an easy score, a simple robbery becomes obscured by his unwitting connection to the victim.

I can go into more detail with the growing obscurity?but I don't want to outdo myself with the word count.

When a cash-hungry escort driver gets wind of an easy score, what should be a simple robbery becomes ever more obscured the deeper he commits to it.

Following a terror attack, a transiting prisoner is diverted to a detention centre where she must establish the unwitting nature of her connection to the attacker.

Thanks for the comments, much appreciated again. The film kind of plays out from two separate?perspectives, I don't want you to think I have overcomplicated the plot because that's not the case. In the second act, the terrorist character essentially…