Categories: Crime
In order to restore her liberty following a discriminatory arrest, a high-end and vivacious, yet substance reliant, escort, must withstand the emotional provocation she’s subjected to during 24-hours locked-down with the parasitic anti-social she’s celling with.
The logline has one major fundamental problem which I simply can't find a solution for - the MC can't do anything except wait in order to achieve her main goal - this isn't very cinematic (if at all...).
After reading your logline, and getting rid of the clutter, I believe your logline needs that one extra thing.
You say, she 'must withstand'? but that's a passive action. Lead characters are pro-active, they have a plan of actions.
How does your lead character cope with her anti-social cellmate? What is her plan?
For instance, does she lie and pretend to be a big-time criminal?
Does she act crazy?
Does she pick a fight with the toughest prisoner to show she is serious?
What's your lead characters plan of action?
I am going to try to reduce the word count to see what we have:
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"When an addicted high-end escort is arrested, she is incarcerated with an anti-social cellmate."
