Jackalboy11

Penpusher · 180 points

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6 loglines
9 reviews

A Scientist and Psychologist Couple manipulate the 2 Year Biosphere Living Experiment by selecting 4 lesbian Women and 4 heterosexual men. As the men go sex-crazy the Scientist allows them out for an evening, which ruins her psychological experiment and the couple, now accidentally locked inside, are at war with each other also. (Improved one from comments on this site. I hope to make this a comedy.)

September 27, 2017
Rom-Com: THE DAY THE MUSIC STOPPED AN AGING ROCK GROUPIE can’t find a Band so she takes it out on every MAN she dates, until she dates a PSYCHIATRIST.

September 20, 2017
Comedy: BLUE BALL BIOSPHERE The 4 YEAR BIOSPHERE EXPERIMENT goes haywire when the 4 WOMEN turn out to be Lesbians and the 4 MEN do all they can to break out!

September 20, 2017
Buddy Comedy: ONE BAD APPLE A LAPD COP’S new partner is a PSYCHIC; just as her powers make incredible busts she gets fired when she fingers the POLICE CHIEF.

September 20, 2017
Rom-Com: LOVE AND MONEY A MAN paid to be a WOMAN’S BOYFRIEND as a legitimate psychological experiment and then cannot shake the connection between Income and Romance in his further dating life. (Until ONE WOMAN is willing to teach him.)

September 20, 2017
Rom-Com: ROMANCE 101 (HIT ME WITH YOUR BEST SHOT) A FATHER pays for WOMEN for his NERDY SON who, later, wonders why he can’t get laid since the day his Dad died. When he finds out the truth he struggles through to being a Man worthy of a Woman.

September 20, 2017

on A Scientist and Psychologist Couple manipulate the 2 Year Biosphere Living Experiment by selecting 4 lesbian Women and 4 heterosexual men. As the men go sex-crazy the Scientist allows them out for an evening, which ruins her psychological experiment and the couple, now accidentally locked inside, are at war with each other also. (Improved one from comments on this site. I hope to make this a comedy.)

Thanks dpg???? Here is the new one:?? When a Scientist and Psychologist Couple manipulate the volunteers for the 2 Year Biosphere Living Experiment they end up sabotaging each other, becoming locked inside also, and at war. 29 words
on Comedy: BLUE BALL BIOSPHERE The 4 YEAR BIOSPHERE EXPERIMENT goes haywire when the 4 WOMEN turn out to be Lesbians and the 4 MEN do all they can to break out!

Here is a newer logline:? A Scientist and Psychologist Couple manipulate the 2 Year Biosphere Living Experiment by selecting 4 lesbian Women and 4 heterosexual men. As the men go sex-crazy the Scientist allows them out for an evening, which…
on After her rich husband and her lover are found murdered on her living room floor, a beautiful woman must prove her innocence to avoid being murdered by the police while in custody.

"After her husband and Mafia Lover are found murdered on her living room floor, a woman, while in police custody must survive assassin inmates to prove her innocence in court."
on When a meltdown started accidentally by a butter sandwich opens a time vortex in a lonely computer geek’s house, he and two previous inhabitants thrown in the present by the vortex, must save the planet from an alien warrior race who thinks humans are unfit to handle time travel.

I agree with the above. While I like the Butter Sandwich to indicate it is a comedy it does take precious words away from the main concept.? Using "lonely" with Computer nerd seems redundant and therefore it's a wasted word…
on Comedy: BLUE BALL BIOSPHERE The 4 YEAR BIOSPHERE EXPERIMENT goes haywire when the 4 WOMEN turn out to be Lesbians and the 4 MEN do all they can to break out!

Yes, it's more of a sketch.? Hahaha? -- really needs work now that I see it up here.? That's the great thing about this and Karel Segers having this opportunity.? Thanks Karel.? And Leon and Nir.
on Rom-Com: THE DAY THE MUSIC STOPPED AN AGING ROCK GROUPIE can’t find a Band so she takes it out on every MAN she dates, until she dates a PSYCHIATRIST.

Nir, that is a very good goal. I am totally searching for comedic situations (knowing very well that drama is needed for comedy) and her forming her own band seems ripe for comedy.? Thanks. And dpg - thanks for more…
on Rom-Com: THE DAY THE MUSIC STOPPED AN AGING ROCK GROUPIE can’t find a Band so she takes it out on every MAN she dates, until she dates a PSYCHIATRIST.

Thank you -- great stuff to work with.? I appreciate it.? The inciting incident would be her getting kicked out from the Last Band that would have her.? Yes, not a likable character exactly.? James
on In order to save his mother, a young man embarks in an adventure to get proof of a friendly monster’s existence.

To save his sick Mother, a Young Boy? must get proof of the?existence of a ?being not known to science, so he travels far and wide and brings back a friendly Monster to everyone's surprise. Not great but you get…
on A dracula who hates killing people for blood finds a companionship in a coward son of a gangster.

I do love the idea of this odd mix of genre characters. I echo most by saying to have an inciting incident and reason for them to need each other or meet each other at least.? The one I read…