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(REVISION #8) When a naïve, rambunctious teenager muscles in on her sister’s singing career in 1963’s England, her dream of stardom fizzles out as she succumbs to the excesses of a Rock’n Roll lifestyle, ends up pregnant, and after a botched illegal abortion, has to re-evaluate her life to halt her downward spiral.

October 18, 2019
(REVISION #7) When a naïve, rambunctious teenager coerces her way into her sibling rival’s singing act in 1963’s England, her sister hates her for it. Succumbing to the seductive excesses of a Rock’n Roll lifestyle, she ends up pregnant, and after a botched illegal abortion, has to re-evaluate her life and make amends to her sister to stop the downward spiral.

October 18, 2019
(REVISION #6):? When a naïve, rambunctious teenage singer in the early sixties in England succumbs to the seductive excesses of the Rock’n Roll lifestyle, she ends up pregnant and is pressured to get an illegal abortion that changes her life forever.

October 15, 2019
(REVISION #5) England 1963. When a naïve teenager launches a singing career with her sister, she is overwhelmed by the seductive excesses of the Rock’n Roll lifestyle. She falls in love, loses her virginity, finds out her boyfriend is married, gets drunk, has revenge sex, ends up pregnant and has to make a difficult decision that will change her life forever.

October 14, 2019
(Revision #4) England 1963. When two teenage sisters, sibling rivals, secure a recording contract that launches their singing career, they soon discover that the Rock’n Roll lifestyle is full of seductive excesses that may destroy their dream of fame and fortune.

October 13, 2019
(Revision #3) It’s 1963. A naive teenager and her older sister, sibling rivals who argue over everything, go to an all-night party that sets them on the path to a singing career. They secure a recording contract, but soon discover that the rock’n roll lifestyle is a roller coaster lifestyle of extreme highs and tragic lows.

October 9, 2019
When a naive teenager and her older sister, sibling rivals who argue over everything, go to an all-night party? that secures a recording contract and launches them into show business. They head to Manchester to work the cabaret circuit only to discover that the rock’n roll lifestyle is a roller coaster ride of extreme highs and tragic lows.

October 9, 2019
England 1962. Two teenage sisters, sibling rivals who argue over everything, go to an all-night party that launches their career as pop singers. Will they rocket to stardom or fizzle out like a defective cherry bomb?

August 14, 2019

on England 1962. Two teenage sisters, sibling rivals who argue over everything, go to an all-night party that launches their career as pop singers. Will they rocket to stardom or fizzle out like a defective cherry bomb?

Thanks fwiw. It is actually both. It's about trying to make it as a pop-singing duo, and running into personal problems that may derail their goal. I'll give you "the Coppola" technique a try.
on England 1962. Two teenage sisters, sibling rivals who argue over everything, go to an all-night party that launches their career as pop singers. Will they rocket to stardom or fizzle out like a defective cherry bomb?

Thanks for your input. Here's another version, but it's much longer: England 1962. When two teenage sisters, sibling rivals, make a demo disc, it launches their singing career. The na've, younger sister is a problem drinker and loses her virginity.…
on A jaded billionaire and business executive sends an amateur reporter on a wild goose hunt, only to have the reporter uncover a dark decade long conspiracy with the executive at the center of it.

I agree with the two previous reviews. I don't understand why the billionaire sends the amateur reporter on a wild goose hunt, especially when he knows he is at the center of a decade-long conspiracy that he wants to keep…
on After a tragic death puts her family in financial jeopardy, a disgraced athlete partners with an old childhood friend to execute an insurance scheme that puts her on the wrong end of a revenge plot.

Was the tragic death a family member or an accident that puts the family in financial jeopardy? Does the tragic death have anything to do with the athlete being disgraced? Is it necessary in the logline to mention partnering with…