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A space explorer leads an expedition after believing to have discovered paradise which gradually descends into madness.

April 5, 2017
A Shakespearian actor becomes unable to tell reality from a play. When his character Mercutio dies he wanders through what he believes is the afterlife distressing his family and friends. Title : A grave man

February 15, 2017
A group of criminals see their escape from prison when an infamous prison breaker arrive. The problem however : he doesn’t want to escape anymore.

February 14, 2017
Two friend’s relationship turns hostile after one of them reveals their love for the other.

February 14, 2017
When the livestock of a small farming community comes under attack from a mysterious predator the sheriff gathers a coalition of the willing to venture into the woods to find and kill the animal. However as they trek further and further into the woods, they are killed off one by one and the sheriff, realizing one of them is the monster in disguise, must solve the mystery of who’s the killer. *This one feels messier then the previous one but how do I accentuate the details whilst still keeping it brief?

February 12, 2017
After a sudden string of cattle mutilations a group of hunters are employed by the community to find and kill the predator responsible. However after venturing deep into the woods the group soon discover something far more sinister then simply just a wild animal.

February 11, 2017
Two forrest rangers, one a quiet loner and one a happily married father to be, while on the search for a child lost in the woods crash their helicopter far from any recognizable landmark they must survive the wilderness and find their way back.

February 10, 2017
Four hunters, all strangers, become lost in the woods while on the hunt for a rare but dangerous animal. Now they must survive the elements, the mysterious animal and themselves as they discover that not all of them are who they initially claimed to be.

February 8, 2017
An aging war criminal seeks his redemption by helping a group of troubled misfits whilst trying to survive brutal persecution from someone he wronged in the past.

January 23, 2017

on A young Thomas Edison must win the top invention prize at the Worlds Fair to prove to his dream girl and her disapproving father that he is worthy before she marries a wealthy suitor.

Am I right in assuming?that you have a very personal investment in the success of this story? It's good if you are passionate about your stories just remember why you are here in the first place. I think the purpose…
on When he starts visualizing the sexual fantasies of anyone he touches, a love-struck freshman has one week to find true love or be doomed to rule hell. Title: SixSixSix

It sounds like "The dead zone" meets "American pie".I would like what the conflict is. Why is ruling in hell bad? Why hell? Did he get his powers from a demon? ?I think you need to make this clearer.
on When the livestock of a small farming community comes under attack from a mysterious predator the sheriff gathers a coalition of the willing to venture into the woods to find and kill the animal. However as they trek further and further into the woods, they are killed off one by one and the sheriff, realizing one of them is the monster in disguise, must solve the mystery of who’s the killer. *This one feels messier then the previous one but how do I accentuate the details whilst still keeping it brief?

When the livestock of a small farming community comes under attack from a mysterious predator the sheriff gathers a coalition of the willing to venture into the woods to find and kill the animal. However as they trek further and…
on After a sudden string of cattle mutilations a group of hunters are employed by the community to find and kill the predator responsible. However after venturing deep into the woods the group soon discover something far more sinister then simply just a wild animal.

I'll rework this one. Thanks everyone for the feedback.