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In 2257, war rages on the planet Aria, a new colony for humanity in distress. The Anunnaki, more numerous and advanced, inflict heavy human and material losses on this planet. At the frontline base, Unitypoint, Sergeant Kane Killian and the soldiers of Bravo Company are on the front lines of the fight against this extraterrestrial race. From the frontline to dangerous missions, these soldiers face the realities of war, dealing with racism, vengeance, respect, and friendships.
I agree with the other reviewer. You have a good idea but this isn't a logline.
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Leaving her shattered acting dream behind, a desperate woman finds a dead body in a motel. To escape the local police chief, she poses as an FBI agent who has disappeared with $10 million. How long can she keep up this lie before the police, the FBI or the local mafia catch her?
This is doing a lot without any real connection. What is her goal? She should have the pursuit of a goal be the reason she quit acting and the discovery of the body introduce the obstacles. Right now it doesn't…
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An immortal bounty hunter roams the Aredon badlands in search of answers to his strange power, becoming the prime target of a desperate aristocrat who believes harvesting these last Deviants is the key to cheating death.
Answers to his power is kind of a weak goal. It has promise but a more concrete goal (he can still look for answers along the way) would drive the story better.
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After a shy teen falls in love with an unknown girl he dreams of every night, he sleeps all day to be with her, but ultimately he has to overcome his shyness in order to find a real girlfriend.
Or what? What are the stakes if he doesn't get a real GF? Why does he need/want a real GF, what happens if he doesn't get a GF? Does he learn the dream is just his ideal? That he can't…
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When he learns the one that got away is getting, a man sets about winning her back, with the help of the fiance’s ex, only to fall for her as well.
What sets this apart from all the other plots that can be described by a similar or identical logline? What's this guy like? Why so hung up on the girl? And if he falls for the other girl doesn't that…
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In a future where winners are conceived using genetic engineering, a born loser buys the identity of a winner on the black market so he can fulfill his lifelong dream of space travel.
I was able to guess this one. I forgot the space travel plot though. There was enough in the logline to make it easily identifiable. You make it seem effortless. Lots of practice I guess.
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In a future where the wealthy live above the smog in floating cities, a group of scavengers — led by a buoyant teen — make the seemingly impossible ascent from the barren earth below in search of essential supplies for their people.
So poor people are looking for supplies by climbing or floating to where the rich are? What supplies? Why do they need the supplies? Why can't they scavenge on the surface? What is the urgency? Is there a specific item…
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When the town bully humiliates him, a mild-mannered cowboy sets out to reclaim his dignity, only to accidentally kill the man, and set off his violent outlaw family.
The one you posted is the best out of the three. Its a good concept IMO but I'm no expert. Seems like it could be a comedy. Maybe he 'accidentally' kills the outlaws out for vengeance as well. What is…
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When in a village destroyed by war something in the shadows begins to haunt and torment him, a dreamy child must fight to survive and find some happiness along the way.
If it's for an animated short I can see where you are going. What is the child doing to find happiness? Is he looking for a place without war? Maybe something like this... A dreamy child seeks refuge after his…
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The dormant past life as an 8th Century Norse Berserker is sparked in a modern day peace loving Hindu man after he witnesses his loved ones murdered in a robbery. Now he must fight to control the growing bloodlust before it destroys him.
Interesting. I like the contrasts of past lifes. Im wondering if the berzerker must have atoned for his violence in order to be reincarnated as a Hindu. I also wonder How is the bloodlust destroying him. Does he want to…
