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A brutal assassin wins custody of his children, one of them can tell the future and they must use his gift to find a way to end their father’s gruesome acts, or their life becomes endangered.
Nope i think i'm okay with this. Thanks
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A brutal assassin wins custody of his children, one of them can tell the future and they must use his gift to find a way to end their father’s gruesome acts, or their life becomes endangered.
Does this mean this log-line is already perfect.? Someone help me out here.
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A brutal assassin wins custody of his children, one of them can tell the future and they must use his gift to find a way to end their father’s gruesome acts, or their life becomes endangered.
Yeah you're right, the boy with the gift is actually the protagonist along with his sister, i should find a way to bring him the spotlight on him. Thanks timmyelliot, I'll change that.
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While being pursued by police and a protection team, David Porter must find the legendary Tony Bill to pay off a gambling debt; or he’s dead
I think i like this alternative better. It's quite straight to the point
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While being pursued by police and a protection team, David Porter must find the legendary Tony Bill to pay off a gambling debt; or he’s dead
Sounds like fun, but i'm a little confused here. If David is pursued by the police, he must have done something wrong, so why a protection team again? I guess you have to pick one. If a protection team then…
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After wrongly being convicted of a crime, three hundred years in the future, a former elite soldier is sent to an experimental prison camp on a distant moon, only to be drawn into a violent conflict between an ancient civilization and his fellow prisoners.
I like this concept, only you have to find a way to trim it up
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A young artist struggles with her newfound spiritual powers after being visited by the angel of prophetic revelation.
But at the same time i do believe that if you mention the cosmic war aspect but with a uniqueness on its own, it will serve as a sort of attracting force for anyone interested in picking up your script.…
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A devoted wife suspecting infidelity poisons her children to hurt her husband and now she must right her wrong and conceal the truth when she later realizes her mistake.
Thanks jjb, I've taken some hints from your suggestion and actually come out with something different and hopefully better. at least i know now the concept of the story is realistic and that's a starting point for me. I learned…
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A devoted wife suspecting infidelity poisons her children to hurt her husband and now she must right her wrong and conceal the truth when she later realizes her mistake.
Actually the story line talks about the woman giving little doses of arsenic which actually causes slow death, since the victims will get sick gradually. I intend to make correction on her part, a situation where she starts asking around…
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A devoted wife suspecting infidelity poisons her children to hurt her husband and now she must right her wrong and conceal the truth when she later realizes her mistake.
Finally... i'm gradually getting there...
