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A 38-year-old man, devout Catholic, and polio victim confined to an iron lung hires a sex surrogate so he can lose his virginity.
I would re write it so it reads as having more intent. For example: After his girlfriend rejects his marriage proposal, a devout Catholic polio victim confined to an iron lung, must hire a prostitute so he can lose his virginity.
I would re write it so it reads as having more intent. For example:
After his girlfriend rejects his marriage proposal, a devout Catholic polio victim confined to an iron lung, must hire a prostitute so he can lose his virginity.
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100% agree with Richiev's points! I'll add a couple of my own - Writing a logline when you already have a finished script is hard and the feedback you get here (on your logline) will often suggest changes to your story that aren't necessarily practical if the script is complete. I think most peopleRead more
100% agree with Richiev’s points! I’ll add a couple of my own –
Some of the points above are things that I’ve learnt the hard way and as Richiev said, you don’t have to take everybody’s advice but remember that everyone here is here to help because we understand the importance and skill involved in a good logline. It’s a really tough thing to be good at, but once you get more comfortable with it, you’ll realise just how useful a skill it can be.
Good luck and I look forward to your first logline!
See lessWhen a colossal monster attacks New York City, a partygoer and his friends must rescue his girlfriend in the middle of the chaos while documenting the events. ? Cloverfield (2008)
I agree with dpg, I think your logline works, however, I do wonder if you could add the part where they document the events.
I agree with dpg, I think your logline works, however, I do wonder if you could add the part where they document the events.
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