1. Posted: October 1, 2015In:

    A recent widow begins using the world?s most popular virtual reality game to escape the pain of real life, but when the game?s characters gain self awareness and start fighting back against the ?Human Invaders? she?ll need to find a way back to reality to survive.

    Knightrider Mentor

    Thank You both for your feedback, it is great that you are both interested and feeling positive about the concept. I will make the change to VR so it states: Virtual Reality Na, I wouldn't say that I want to use a certain game, however if I were to say the most influence idea for the game would be aRead more

    Thank You both for your feedback, it is great that you are both interested and feeling positive about the concept. I will make the change to VR so it states: Virtual Reality

    Na, I wouldn’t say that I want to use a certain game, however if I were to say the most influence idea for the game would be anything along the lines of Second Life, the idea people can espcae who they are and lead entirely different lives online is fascinating. If we are killers in the digital realm is this a deep seeded part of our lives that truly exist, can fantasy truly replace reality and if we build complex systems to interact with within these systems what happens when they decide they have rights and so forth.

    The other reason I used the term most popular is: I felt it established reluctance on the part of the owners of this game to not shut it down straight away, they they and a lot of the general population and almost dependant on it, it’s the worlds first digital drug so to speak so when problems start occurring they can’t shut it down as it will cost them too much money, and there are too many people inside who would die if they did so that amplifies the stakes.

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  2. Posted: October 1, 2015In:

    An Empress too pacific to take a stand allows the relationship with her neighbors countries turn sour, while one of them demands more resources from her country and she refuses, war breaks out between them.

    dpg Singularity

    Too pacific = too weak.? Well, a character can start out that way, but the logline should indicate a? plot?line that forces her to grow, ?to?become stronger, a more assertive -- and more savvy -- leader of her country.? "She refuses"? is a start, but? just saying "No" isn't enough.? Then what happenRead more

    Too pacific = too weak.? Well, a character can start out that way, but the logline should indicate a? plot?line that forces her to grow, ?to?become stronger, a more assertive — and more savvy — leader of her country.? “She refuses”? is a start, but? just saying “No” isn’t enough.? Then what happens?? After?war breaks out, what must she do?

    And is this based on an actual historic personage?? Or is it pure fiction?

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  3. Posted: September 30, 2015In:

    With the family farm in flames, his father murdered, and his mother and sister kidnapped it’s up to young Leif to track them, revenge his father, find his mother and sister and bring them back home, but the Gods have other plans for Leif and his family..

    FFF Mentor

    Hello, usually You don't use personal names in the logline (like "Leif"), because names means nothing (unless the character is a famous real person like Mozart). The basic idea is that each elements of a logline must have a meaning for the plot (if the hero is called "Erlend", to keep the name?scandRead more

    Hello,
    usually You don’t use personal names in the logline (like “Leif”), because names means nothing (unless the character is a famous real person like Mozart). The basic idea is that each elements of a logline must have a meaning for the plot (if the hero is called “Erlend”, to keep the name?scandinavian like Leif, does it make any difference?).
    To understand if I would like the movie or not I feel like I need to know what you mean by “god have other plans”: I suggest to add?some details in the logline about this?-?besides you can cut some details from the setting – mother and sister kidnapped for me is enough, I don’t care a lot about the farm in flames in this context, maybe you can sum up better?- the kidnap gives enought motivation to the character. I would spend some words about the opponent too.

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