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When her husband takes a sabbatical from his family, and her children are placed in therapy, she struggles at parenting.
The designated genre is "Coming of Age".? This tag? indicates that the narrative will be framed from the pov of one of the children.? That the protagonist will be one of the children.? But the logline is framed from the pov of the wife. So who owns the story?? Who is in the driver's seat of the plotRead more
The designated genre is “Coming of Age”.? This tag? indicates that the narrative will be framed from the pov of one of the children.? That the protagonist will be one of the children.? But the logline is framed from the pov of the wife.
So who owns the story?? Who is in the driver’s seat of the plot?? Who is the protagonist?
See lessAn outcast mother of four in an elite society learns that her husband?s vacation to Barcelona is more like a sabbatical from his family. With all four kids suspended from school and are in therapy, she struggles to gain respect in a judgmental society as well as be a good mother.
Unless Barcelona is important to the story, you can skip that detail in the logline. Also, you say the lead character is an outcast, but you haven't told us from where she has been cast out. ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ "When her husband takesRead more
Unless Barcelona is important to the story, you can skip that detail in the logline.
Also, you say the lead character is an outcast, but you haven’t told us from where she has been cast out.
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“When her husband takes a sabbatical from the family, a small-town woman, new to high society, must help her and her savant children navigate, and adjust to their new community.”
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Agree with dpg. Specificity is often the key to a good logline. Having a very clear understanding of the plot (at least until the midpoint or end of act II) is essential. Since the message here is going to be about vanity I imagine, it's worth telling us specifically what is corrupted and then whatRead more
Agree with dpg.
Specificity is often the key to a good logline. Having a very clear understanding of the plot (at least until the midpoint or end of act II) is essential. Since the message here is going to be about vanity I imagine, it’s worth telling us specifically what is corrupted and then what she plans to do about it. This is potentially just the inciting incident. The corruption appears as she walks back into school first day back, and that’s the perfect Act I break. Entering the upside-down world. ?But what happens next?
Interesting though. Stick with it! I love a good high school coming of age film and this, as dpg has said, is certainly a topical subject.
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