1. Posted: August 16, 2021In:

    In the mid 1970’s an, introverted, midwestern teen is murdered at the height of unwanted, meteoric, fame. Jealously, greed and opportunity implicate family and friends but no one is ever convicted. 20 years later, a fan accidentally begins unraveling the truth which will forever alter the lives of everyone involved.

    Richiev Singularity

    Too much backstory and you end the logline where it begins. "When she discovers the truth behind the 20-year-old murder of her favorite rock star a mega-fan must..." (Then tell us what she must do)

    Too much backstory and you end the logline where it begins.

    “When she discovers the truth behind the 20-year-old murder of her favorite rock star a mega-fan must…” (Then tell us what she must do)

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  2. Posted: July 26, 2021In:

    A young boy is taken away from his father, His mom takes him across the country, and cuts off his relationship with his father. He gets raped by his mother, and he is trapped in the attic all by himself he must find a way to escape.

    Odie Samurai

    Consider the following: What is the psychology of this mother that forces her to kidnap her son? What’s her destination and goal? What must the father do to save his son? Take care.

    Consider the following:
    What is the psychology of this mother that forces her to kidnap her son? What’s her destination and goal? What must the father do to save his son?

    Take care.

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  3. Posted: July 25, 2021In:

    When a young boy is taken away from his father, and starts to get raped by his mother, he must find a way to escape.

    Nordic12 Penpusher

    It reads like an opening line or a teaser not a complete logline. Also delete"When" and start with"A" and delete "starts to get raped" and insert "gets raped" to tighten it up and make the action more immediate

    It reads like an opening line or a teaser not a complete logline. Also delete”When” and start with”A” and delete “starts to get raped” and insert “gets raped” to tighten it up and make the action more immediate

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