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A remand prisoner is re-routed to a temp facility where she must play ball with her vile cellmate in order to identify her own unwitting connection to the terror attack that diverted her.
It seems like you are shutting the barn door after the horses have escaped. ----- "In order to prevent a terrorist attack, an FBI agent goes to prison undercover and has forty-eight hours to deceive her cellmate into giving up the detail of the attack." ----- It ups the ante if the Terrorist attackRead more
It seems like you are shutting the barn door after the horses have escaped.
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“In order to prevent a terrorist attack, an FBI agent goes to prison undercover and has forty-eight hours to deceive her cellmate into giving up the detail of the attack.”
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It ups the ante if the Terrorist attack hasn’t happened yet and getting the information from the cellmate is vital to stopping the terrorist plot.
A mild-mannered but disgruntled teller leads a hostage revolt against his captors during a bank siege in order to get away with the stolen loot for himself.
Tony Edward: I am attracted to the? story because: 1]I want to see how he pulls it off without getting caught.? It essentially becomes a heist flick, does it not? 2] I want to see the character arc, how circumstances provide an opportunity for a nice guy, a heretofore compliant, law-abiding milquetoRead more
Tony Edward:
I am attracted to the? story because:
1]I want to see how he pulls it off without getting caught.? It essentially becomes a heist flick, does it not?
2] I want to see the character arc, how circumstances provide an opportunity for a nice guy, a heretofore compliant, law-abiding milquetoast, to unleash his repressed shadow .
As for moral justification, what’s the moral justification for Danny Ocean ripping off the treasure vault of 3 Las Vegas casinos?? ?There really isn’t.? The? audience buys into the character and the heist on the basis of emotional factors.? So sell the emotional justification, not the moral.
Regards and best wishes with this story.
See lessWhen her amnesiac daughter awakens next to a headless, burnt corpse in the woods, a bipolar detective must uncover the secrets of a small town and its paranormal history, to find out the truth and prove her daughter?s innocence.
I like it, this really sounds interesting. Well done! I would shorten the logline and add a bit of tension between the daughter and mother (why not...): After her estranged daughter wakes up beside a headless corpse, a bipolar detective must uncover the paranormal secrets of a small town to prove heRead more
I like it, this really sounds interesting.
Well done!
I would shorten the logline and add a bit of tension between the daughter and mother (why not…):
After her estranged daughter wakes up beside a headless corpse, a bipolar detective must uncover the paranormal secrets of a small town to prove her daughter?s innocence.
The sizzle (I’m looking at you DPG…) here is her daughter being in trouble with paranormal stuff, therefore, best you cut anything that isn’t necessary to describe that. As far as the plot goes, finding out the truth is implicit in her primary goal – to prove the daughter innocent, so you don’t need it in the logline.
All the best developing this concept.
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