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A disgraced cop, offered the chance to regain custody of his son unearths a hidden layer of secrets of those involved within and outside the law when he must catch a serial killer before more children die.
I like the idea of your story but felt the logline could do with a bit more work. Here's a rewrite for your consideration. Use it as your own if it suits your story. "Despite risk of becoming the scapegoat of a corrupt police force, an honest cop commits unwarranted intervention against a child killRead more
I like the idea of your story but felt the logline could do with a bit more work. Here’s a rewrite for your consideration. Use it as your own if it suits your story.
“Despite risk of becoming the scapegoat of a corrupt police force, an honest cop commits unwarranted intervention against a child killer thus hindering his chance of regaining custody of his son.”
See lessA disgraced ER doctor reinvents himself as an amphetamine cook getting entangled in helping members escape a community with a violent secret.
This feels like two stories. One about an ER doc turned meth cook, and the other about someone helping people escape somewhere. Try starting with...After becoming entangled in a violent and secretive community, a disgraced ER doctor must...(insert second-act-main-action here).
This feels like two stories. One about an ER doc turned meth cook, and the other about someone helping people escape somewhere. Try starting with…After becoming entangled in a violent and secretive community, a disgraced ER doctor must…(insert second-act-main-action here).
See lessUn buscado black hack, se encontrará en una situación riesgosa al ponerse en riesgo su verdadera identidad y con ello su plan en peligro su plan contra el Estado.
. Hi, Milyy. Hope you’re great. Your logline sounds very interesting. But it's a little bit unclear. Let's break it down: 1.Who is the main character? This black hat hacker, who is the most wanted. 2.Where? Is it a goverment in crisis? is it the city of an existing or fictitious country? 3.When? I sRead more
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Hi, Milyy. Hope you’re great.
Your logline sounds very interesting. But it’s a little bit unclear. Let’s break it down:
1.Who is the main character? This black hat hacker, who is the most wanted.
2.Where? Is it a goverment in crisis? is it the city of an existing or fictitious country?
3.When? I suppose you mean the contemporary era, although it can also be in a cyberpunk future.
4.Why? (la razón o el llamado a la aventura) At first I thought the revealing of his identity was the reason but now I realized there’s no reason why. You can try by killing his son or lover or the good people of his country if he is the “good things that seem bad” kind of guy.
5.Is there a more specific antagonist beside the state? Like a corrupt president, or the goverment’s best hacker. The Mc needs someone’s face to punch >:)
6.What’s his goal? (¿Para qué?) Is his goal to clean his name or overthrow the state. I suppose it’s the last one.
7.Stakes: (apuestas) What’s in game? His identity or the safety of his people, or maybe the security of another nation.
With everything you have given me I can build the following example:
“In a future dystopian city, when the corrupt government’s top hacker kills his lover, the most wanted black hat hacker must topple the government before his identity is revealed.”
Although this is just an example, you can also draw your conclusions.
Saludos desde México. 🙂
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