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An impoverished teen drug mule threaten to inform by Police must find a way to get out of the business and save her sister being held as collateral.
Philosophy aside, I understand the point you made clear in the first instance. The "good person does a bad thing for the right reason" theme can still be used in your story, however I believe that the plot isn't working. The list of beats you posted above do not come across as a sound structure to mRead more
Philosophy aside, I understand the point you made clear in the first instance. The “good person does a bad thing for the right reason” theme can still be used in your story, however I believe that the plot isn’t working.
The list of beats you posted above do not come across as a sound structure to me, perhaps it would be more beneficial to take into account the comments given and consider re structuring the plot. The main character can still be a “bad” person or not likable, but their story needs to be compelling in its motivation and stakes, to do this a re structuring the plot will likely help.
See lessAfter being pressured by the cops to turn informant a teen is sent on a run by her drug dealer boss, who is holding her younger sister, knowing this run will get her killed.
How about something like: A teenage drug courier must undertake a suicidal drug run to save the life of her sister being held hostage by her drug boss. (24 words) That she's been talking to the police is a complication for her and a motivation for the drug boss. ?But it seems to me that the kernel oRead more
How about something like:
A teenage drug courier must undertake a suicidal drug run to save the life of her sister being held hostage by her drug boss.
(24 words)
That she’s been talking to the police is a complication for her and a motivation for the drug boss. ?But it seems to me that the kernel of the concept is that she’s trying to redeem herself, rectify her bad choices, reboot her life. ?And maybe she will survive. ?And maybe she’ll die. ?But at least she’s going to save her sister’s life if she can’t save her own.
fwiw.
See lessWHEN A YOUNG SKATER IS THREATENED WITH EVICTION, HE TURNS TO HIS RAG TAG GROUP OF FRIENDS TO HELP HIM PULL OFF A YUPPIE HEIST TO END THEM ALL. (CA$H)
"When his mother is threatened with eviction by a greedy banker, a streetwise skater and misfits friends plot to take the bank down and save his childhood home."
“When his mother is threatened with eviction by a greedy banker, a streetwise skater and misfits friends plot to take the bank down and save his childhood home.”
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