1. Posted: November 9, 2015In:

    After his father dies under mysterious circumstances, a young man gets tangled up in an undercover operation against London’s most notorious crime family.

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    Hello, I agree with this: "stronger cause-and-effect link stated between the father?s death and the young man getting involved in a covert operation."

    Hello,
    I agree with this: “stronger cause-and-effect link stated between the father?s death and the young man getting involved in a covert operation.”

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  2. Posted: November 9, 2015In:

    When a midnight-show radio host receives an anonymous hint about a mysterious murder, he sets out to find the real killer and needs to convince the police they’re after the wrong person.

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    bamgomes Logliner

    There is a book with a similar concept. Here's the logline of "Intent To Kill" By James?Grippando: Ryan James, a former minor-league baseball player turned sports radio host, receives an anonymous tip about the unsolved hit-and-run accident that killed his wife three years prior live on the air, butRead more

    There is a book with a similar concept.

    Here’s the logline of “Intent To Kill” By James?Grippando:

    Ryan James, a former minor-league baseball player turned sports radio host, receives an anonymous tip about the unsolved hit-and-run accident that killed his wife three years prior live on the air, but the information points to a powerful New England family, and puts Ryan, his wife’s brother “Babes,” and the case’s prosecutor in danger.

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  3. Posted: November 5, 2015In:

    Unable to become a police officer because of a past felony conviction, a man finds his own way as a maverick bounty hunter to fight for the justice he never got. When he and his partner receive their next assignment, they go undercover in a town full of criminals and struggle to stay covert while in pursuit of their target.

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    dpg Singularity

    >>>Unable to become a police officer because of a past felony conviction, a man finds his own way as a maverick bounty hunter to fight for the justice he never got.All of that is either backstory which means it's (mostly) off screen.? But a logline is about what is shown on screen. ? Or, alRead more

    >>>Unable to become a police officer because of a past felony conviction, a man finds his own way as a maverick bounty hunter to fight for the justice he never got.

    All of that is either backstory which means it’s (mostly) off screen.? But a logline is about what is shown on screen. ? Or, alternatively, all of that is part of the setup which means it occurs in the first act.

    So the story — what the logline should focus on — seems to begin when he goes undercover in a town full of criminals.

    >> while in pursuit of their target

    Who, specifically, are they looking for?? And what are the stakes?? Is he going undercover for the “justice he never got” or for the reward money as a maverick bounty hunter?? And what is the “justice he never got” — what does that mean?

    A protagonist can certainly have an interesting past that motivates his present actions.? But there isn’t enough space in a logline to cram all that in and a logline is about the present, what the protagonist must do now, not what he may have done — or had done to him — in the past.

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