1. Posted: January 8, 2020In:

    After the die-hard romantic paramour of a married woman is asked to help kill her abusive stepfather, he plans the perfect murder but when he discovers she is using him as a pawn, heartbroken, he plots his revenge.

    Richiev Singularity

    The twist should not be about "Plotting"Instead, it should happen quickly, and as a big reveal.The very trap that was supposed to "get" the husband is expertly turned around on the vengeful wife when it's revealed Her Paramour and Her husband are lovers.(Or the other way around. The husband convinciRead more

    The twist should not be about “Plotting”

    Instead, it should happen quickly, and as a big reveal.

    The very trap that was supposed to “get” the husband is expertly turned around on the vengeful wife when it’s revealed Her Paramour and Her husband are lovers.

    (Or the other way around. The husband convincing his lover to kill his wife only to be double-crossed by the lover and his wife at the end)

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  2. Posted: January 7, 2020In:

    After discovering he has a son, an exiled gangster must confront his vengeful ex partner in crime, in order to save the family he abandoned.

    Trix Samurai

    I think the premise could be an intriguing one... but I think it's vague at the moment as to what's happening and why: How did he discover he has a son? ? Is the peril because the ex-partner has discovered he has a son? Why is he exiled? Is he saving the son or the abandoned family (or both)? ?If heRead more

    I think the premise could be an intriguing one… but I think it’s vague at the moment as to what’s happening and why:

    • How did he discover he has a son? ? Is the peril because the ex-partner has discovered he has a son?
    • Why is he exiled?
    • Is he saving the son or the abandoned family (or both)? ?If he abandoned the family previously, why is he bothered about them – or has the son given him a new viewpoint?
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  3. Posted: December 30, 2019In:

    When a conservative pastor learns his only son is homosexual, he tries to prevent his son from expressing himself as he struggles to come to terms with his son?s identity. or When a man decides to reveal to his father, a conservative pastor, that he is homosexual, he must maintain his individuality as his father tries to bend him to his will.

    dpg Singularity

    I don't see how this story idea differentiates itself from "Boy Erased" (2018).? The latter is more specific about the boy's predicament, and has a? more compelling inciting incident -- the pastor deliberately outs his son.? And "Boy Erased" confronts the son with a more specific and interesting draRead more

    I don’t see how this story idea differentiates itself from “Boy Erased” (2018).? The latter is more specific about the boy’s predicament, and has a? more compelling inciting incident — the pastor deliberately outs his son.? And “Boy Erased” confronts the son with a more specific and interesting dramatic problem: the father sends him to a conversion camp.?

    And “Boy Erased” is also based on real people, real events.

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