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A talented Fil-Am restaurateur returns to his country of birth where he is challenged by an unscrupulous boyhood friend, with a promise of co-ownership, to transform his failing Manila restaurant to number one on TripAdvisor.
The goal of a story doesn't always have to be about saving the world. But the goal should always 'mean the world' to the lead character. I like the elements in your logline but why does making his friend's restaurant number 1 on Trip Advisor 'mean the world' to the lead character? In your story, theRead more
The goal of a story doesn’t always have to be about saving the world.
But the goal should always ‘mean the world’ to the lead character.
I like the elements in your logline but why does making his friend’s restaurant number 1 on Trip Advisor ‘mean the world’ to the lead character?
In your story, the lead has a life back home. If he fails it doesn’t matter. As written in your logline and synopsis, there doesn’t seem to be any stakes.
Anyway, it’s a great concept it just seems to be missing a compelling reason for the lead to want to accomplish his goal. I believe adding that one element would improve an already good story.
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We have a lead character. Good What is the lead character's goal... Not sure from this logline. What is standing in the way of the lead's goal? These are essential to a logline
We have a lead character. Good
What is the lead character’s goal… Not sure from this logline.
What is standing in the way of the lead’s goal?
These are essential to a logline
See lessWhen an ambitious yet struggling young man attempts yet another get-rich-quick scheme against the wishes of his family, things rapidly escalate in all the wrong directions as he realizes all the money he’s just lost in the stock market was drug money demanded to be repaid, the same day.
The thing about get rich scheme caught my attention. We all know that type of person. But I am curious - what is the main relation in this movie. Finding that relation and adding it to the logline I think would help. You have your action line. But what is the relationship line? Also curious about whRead more
The thing about get rich scheme caught my attention. We all know that type of person.
But I am curious – what is the main relation in this movie. Finding that relation and adding it to the logline I think would help.
You have your action line. But what is the relationship line?
Also curious about who is the main opponent.. is it the drug dealers or his parents?
All the best!
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