1. Posted: August 10, 2023In:

    When the past visits an overmedicated mental patient with a fascinating history, she awakens to unveil her story and upend her life at risk of a relapse. My name is Mary Magdalene.

    Richiev Singularity

    We have a lead character. Good What is the lead character's goal... Not sure from this logline. What is standing in the way of the lead's goal? These are essential to a logline

    We have a lead character. Good
    What is the lead character’s goal… Not sure from this logline.
    What is standing in the way of the lead’s goal?

    These are essential to a logline

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  2. Posted: August 2, 2023In:

    When an ambitious yet struggling young man attempts yet another get-rich-quick scheme against the wishes of his family, things rapidly escalate in all the wrong directions as he realizes all the money he’s just lost in the stock market was drug money demanded to be repaid, the same day.

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    The thing about get rich scheme caught my attention. We all know that type of person. But I am curious - what is the main relation in this movie. Finding that relation and adding it to the logline I think would help. You have your action line. But what is the relationship line? Also curious about whRead more

    The thing about get rich scheme caught my attention. We all know that type of person.
    But I am curious – what is the main relation in this movie. Finding that relation and adding it to the logline I think would help.
    You have your action line. But what is the relationship line?
    Also curious about who is the main opponent.. is it the drug dealers or his parents?

    All the best!
    Nis

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  3. Posted: July 5, 2023In:

    Called to a disturbance a cop discovers a murder and everything points to his daughter. He calls upon favours, legal and illegal to hide the truth

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    "A police officer betrays his vows and code of ethics to hide what he believes is evidence his daughter committed a murder." However, you might need to put a face to the conflict. "A police officer betrays his vows and code of ethics to hide what he believes is evidence his daughter committed a murdRead more

    “A police officer betrays his vows and code of ethics to hide what he believes is evidence his daughter committed a murder.”

    However, you might need to put a face to the conflict.

    “A police officer betrays his vows and code of ethics to hide what he believes is evidence his daughter committed a murder, from a persistent internal affairs officer.”

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