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– [x] Last bloodlines of immortality plot against an ingenious FBI agent after discovering her immortality and descendance that would uncover all of their sinister secrets.
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When a languorous girl is warped through space-time reincarnating in the bodies of famous women after crying for the very first time, she needs to find a way out of limbo before she’ll be trapped forever.
This could be a cool fantasy/adventure film! It seems like a family film peppered with darker moments. From reading certain words ("time-space", "warped"), I thought your story was science-fiction, until I saw that you've listed it fantasy. I like the descriptor for your MC. "Time-space" sounds awkwRead more
This could be a cool fantasy/adventure film! It seems like a family film peppered with darker moments. From reading certain words (“time-space”, “warped”), I thought your story was science-fiction, until I saw that you’ve listed it fantasy. I like the descriptor for your MC. “Time-space” sounds awkward to me. If I’m not mistaken, it’s called space-time, or you could say time and space. “The very first tears of her lifetime” is too wordy. Instead, you could write: her first tears. “Her ability”, you should specify what her ability is. “Mysterious man”, I think your antagonist needs a stronger descriptor.
See lessWhen a cunning Knight outsmarts a young rebellious Gnome, he must quickly overcome self-pity from such betrayal and get his lump of gold back before the Knight ignites a gold rush, which would destroy Gnomes’ precious homeland inside an Iron Mountain.
"When his gold is stolen by a cunning knight, a rebellious gnome must get the stolen ore back before the knight returns to his homeland and starts a gold rush into his people's land."
“When his gold is stolen by a cunning knight, a rebellious gnome must get the stolen ore back before the knight returns to his homeland and starts a gold rush into his people’s land.”
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