1. Posted: May 1, 2019In:

    After an explosion opens a hole for demons to escape from Hell, the dweller of humanity, aka the devil’s son, goes to earth to run up the demons before Yahweh sends his armies to clean up the mess, sending every demons into oblivion along with the dweller, if he’s still there.

    The_CNI Samurai

    There are some questions that spawn from reading this logline. What explosion is this? Who caused it? Was it accidental? If so then you don't need to say that an explosion opened the portal, you can just say that the portal was opened. Also as Richiev said, it works so much better with a ticking cloRead more

    There are some questions that spawn from reading this logline. What explosion is this? Who caused it? Was it accidental? If so then you don’t need to say that an explosion opened the portal, you can just say that the portal was opened. Also as Richiev said, it works so much better with a ticking clock. That way we feel the urgency and stakes.

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  2. Posted: April 30, 2019In:

    A sulky Teenager from a Forest tribe is magically transported to a Medieval society populated with mythical creatures after she accidentally breaks a sacred statue. She must find the Infamous Witch in order to fix the statue before sunset or transform into a spirit creature forever.

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    Richiev Singularity

    The story is coming together, it is unique enough to stand on its own but you could use 'The Wizard of Oz' as a template. This is a good thing (Same but different sells in Hollywood) As for the logline, is the lead character still a caveman (woman) as in previous versions of the story or is the 'forRead more

    The story is coming together, it is unique enough to stand on its own but you could use ‘The Wizard of Oz’ as a template. This is a good thing (Same but different sells in Hollywood)

    As for the logline, is the lead character still a caveman (woman) as in previous versions of the story or is the ‘forest tribe’ something different now?

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  3. Posted: April 19, 2019In:

    A young orphaned girl from a Forest tribe is magically transported to a medieval futuristic realm populated with talking Animals and Mythological creatures. She must confront her long lost father, the Vicious king in order to restore peace in the realm and bring him back home.

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    Ckharper Samurai

    This is tough with so many concepts and agree with comments above. Here?s my best stab - Through a bit of magic, a girl journeys to a futuristic realm where she learns her father is its vicious king. She must kidnap the king to save the realm.

    This is tough with so many concepts and agree with comments above. Here?s my best stab –

    Through a bit of magic, a girl journeys to a futuristic realm where she learns her father is its vicious king. She must kidnap the king to save the realm.

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