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After mystical criminals break a powerful witch out of prison, a wizard a part of a magic police force must lead her first mission to catch them.
You should make it personal "When the witch who killed her family escapes from prison, a determined mage-hunter comes out of retirement to take down the bitch." (I know 'bitch' probably doesn't work)
You should make it personal
“When the witch who killed her family escapes from prison, a determined mage-hunter comes out of retirement to take down the bitch.” (I know ‘bitch’ probably doesn’t work)
See lessWhen her occult bookshop is burned down, an angry, self-loathing Witch must stop a secret organisation from murdering powerful witches.
If you were to detail the description of the antagonist it would help understand the story. It's not 'giving away' the ending, it's a necessity for the reader to understand your story.
If you were to detail the description of the antagonist it would help understand the story. It’s not ‘giving away’ the ending, it’s a necessity for the reader to understand your story.
See lessAfter his son is shot in a drive-by, a gangster must use his crippled werewolf abilities to kill the vengeful vampire who has been attacking his gang.
I think that making a gang of werewolves vs a gang of vampires is just the premise of a number of other movies. It is just a CGI fest while I am writing a much more personal story set in an urban world. Besides, I wouldn't really see the point of a pack of werewolves or vampires entrenching themselvRead more
I think that making a gang of werewolves vs a gang of vampires is just the premise of a number of other movies. It is just a CGI fest while I am writing a much more personal story set in an urban world. Besides, I wouldn’t really see the point of a pack of werewolves or vampires entrenching themselves in an urban landscape like that. Rather than being a gangster setting with a touch of magic, it becomes a magical setting with some urban combat thrown in.
In other words, putting too much magic into a story like this takes away the ‘magic’ of the story.
Putting a whole pack of werewolves into it takes away from the story, which is pretty simple. One woman trying to get vengeance, and one man trying to protect everything he has left. While the gangs are used by both sides, they are put to the fairly quickly as the two powerhouses battle it out.
And in response to “For this genre, I submit that ideally, the inciting incident should establish ? or at least tip a reader off ? what kind of world or character the story is about.”
It does. It’s about a gangster, it just happens to have some magic thrown in.
See lessThanks for your input. I will review this thread again and see if I can find any suggestions to include.