1. Posted: September 13, 2021In:

    At a truck stop in Arkansas, a retired alcoholic cop turned paranormal investigator on a quest to reunite with his deceased son warns a brother and sister not to check into the Hardin Hill Bed and Breakfast.

    Richiev Singularity

    This is a scene not a story. A Story: Lead character Something happens to them This creates a goal Something stands in the way of that goal Who is the lead character? What do they want? What is standing in their way?

    This is a scene not a story.

    A Story:
    Lead character
    Something happens to them
    This creates a goal
    Something stands in the way of that goal

    Who is the lead character?
    What do they want?
    What is standing in their way?

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  2. Posted: September 7, 2021In:

    When a young man meets his girlfriends family for the first time he slowly realises he is in dager and he must get out.

    beezeebee Penpusher

    Hi nines, Sounds like a logline crafted after watching the movie "Get Out," which is even the same genre...

    Hi nines,

    Sounds like a logline crafted after watching the movie “Get Out,” which is even the same genre…

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  3. Posted: September 7, 2021In:

    When a lethal alien is brought on board a spaceship by accident, the crew has to fight for their survival in order to escape

    Sonja Penpusher

    In space no one can hear you in space. Jokes aside, nice logline! I'm thinking to tighten it, maybe you could write "when a lethal alien is found onboard a spaceship" instead? Also, is no one the main character, do we follow the entire crew? Could someone hold the POV for the logline?

    In space no one can hear you in space.

    Jokes aside, nice logline!
    I’m thinking to tighten it, maybe you could write “when a lethal alien is found onboard a spaceship” instead?
    Also, is no one the main character, do we follow the entire crew? Could someone hold the POV for the logline?

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