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A naive woman is seduced by clones who she believes are one and the same and endangers herself by allowing the duplicated men chances at redemption.
Getting a horror “Multiplicity" movie vibe :) Consider the following: 1. The genre could be Fantasy – where’s the scare? 2. Where does all this take place? A worldbuilder may help orientate. 3. What is the protag’s goal? 4. I cannot envision what “endangers herself” looks like on screen. 5. Are theRead more
Getting a horror “Multiplicity” movie vibe 🙂
Consider the following:
1. The genre could be Fantasy – where’s the scare?
2. Where does all this take place? A worldbuilder may help orientate.
3. What is the protag’s goal?
4. I cannot envision what “endangers herself” looks like on screen.
5. Are the clones your baddies? If so, what is their redemption goal involving this woman?
Take care.
See lessA young lawyer discovers through the diary of one of his ancestors that his family has served an ancient vampire for generations, so he must decide between succumbing to power and greed or doing the right thing and losing everything.
I would avoid loglines that end with a choice. Because watching a 90 movie where the lead is like "Should I?" or "Shouldn't I?" Makes the lead seem indecisive. Besides 90 minutes of someone trying to make a decision isn't very compelling. Instead, I would have the lead be 'Trapped' The lead discoverRead more
I would avoid loglines that end with a choice. Because watching a 90 movie where the lead is like “Should I?” or “Shouldn’t I?” Makes the lead seem indecisive. Besides 90 minutes of someone trying to make a decision isn’t very compelling.
Instead, I would have the lead be ‘Trapped’
The lead discovers he is bound by a contract his ancestors made and the story would be him trying to figure a way out.
Dig your lead into a hole then start shoveling dirt on top of him.
See lessFive delinquents must find a way to survive when they are sent to a behavioural camp run by a sadistic cult.
Dig it! Consider the following to strengthen your logline: 1. Anything more to these delinquents? They may just be a motley crew of felonious youths with nothing in common except being forced to this camp – and survive. Any elaborations may help to provide an ironic play on words for your premise. 2Read more
Dig it!
Consider the following to strengthen your logline:
1. Anything more to these delinquents? They may just be a motley crew of felonious youths with nothing in common except being forced to this camp – and survive. Any elaborations may help to provide an ironic play on words for your premise.
2. What’s this sadistic cult’s MO – what are they known for? I read once a boot camp that had “fight nights”.
3. A camp destination/location is key for reader orientation.
4. Most camps have a set timeframe, maybe you can use this as your ticking clock devise e.g., “… must survive a three day …” just food for thought.
This is what I can see so far:
“A group of delinquents must survive a behavioral boot camp ran by a sadistic cult”
Hope you found this constructive, keep going!
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