1. Posted: March 16, 2023In:

    The global rise of demonic possessions brings together five exorcists from different faiths to combat an evil unlike any they have ever encountered.

    Odie Samurai

    Leaning towards: “A global rise of demonic possessions brings together five exorcists from different faiths to save the world from evil incarnate.” Since I don’t know the boss-level evil, whether it will be spiritual or physical (sounds physical based on possessions), I riffed with “incarnate.” I woRead more

    Leaning towards:
    “A global rise of demonic possessions brings together five exorcists from different faiths to save the world from evil incarnate.”

    Since I don’t know the boss-level evil, whether it will be spiritual or physical (sounds physical based on possessions), I riffed with “incarnate.”

    I would love to watch it, make this yours. Take care.

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  2. Posted: September 28, 2022In:

    After having her first same-sex encounter, a young girl is being attacked by a masked killer.

    FilmMaker Penpusher

    It is a bit lacklustre; we're not told much about the young girl; what does her having her first same-sex experience have to do with the rest of the logline? Seems as though it was thrown in there for some sort of plot without thinking it through. It doesn't tell us much, just a generic horror/teenRead more

    It is a bit lacklustre; we’re not told much about the young girl; what does her having her first same-sex experience have to do with the rest of the logline? Seems as though it was thrown in there for some sort of plot without thinking it through. It doesn’t tell us much, just a generic horror/teen movie logline without the personality.

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  3. Posted: September 9, 2022In:

    A college student has a superstition that people killed at a music festival she goes to.

    BenGilani Logliner

    Hi tony18, To me, this is what you are trying to say: "A college student has a premonition that there will be a massacre at a music festival she is going to attend." But I think the logline above should be co continued with "and", and you should mention what the college student does about it. I hopeRead more

    Hi tony18,

    To me, this is what you are trying to say:

    “A college student has a premonition that there will be a massacre at a music festival she is going to attend.”

    But I think the logline above should be co continued with “and”, and you should mention what the college student does about it.

    I hope this helps
    Good Luck

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