1. Posted: November 24, 2017In:

    When broke indie movie-maker and his friends heads into a desert to shot found footage horror movie, they stumble upon a real monster and have to fight to survive.

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    Also, does you indie movie director have a goal? Is he about to lose his home? Is his wife making him quit unless he makes a hit film? (She has given him 10 years to follow his dream, now with only a few months left this is his last chance) Is he about to lose his company? The lead having a goal couRead more

    Also, does you indie movie director have a goal? Is he about to lose his home? Is his wife making him quit unless he makes a hit film? (She has given him 10 years to follow his dream, now with only a few months left this is his last chance) Is he about to lose his company?

    The lead having a goal could also help distinguish your story. (Just a thought)

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  2. Posted: November 24, 2017In:

    A man is held by unseen captives that thwart his every escape attempt. He discovers that they are his other personalities that have trying to stop his most violent personality escaping and killing again.

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    I prefer it if he dies (I write as I twist my evil looking mustache...) it gives him an element of sacrifice that redeems his character. However, for it not to feel hollow and labored, you'll need a second "real" character to benefit from the MC's sacrifice, otherwise, it was all for nothing. CouldRead more

    I prefer it if he dies (I write as I twist my evil looking mustache…) it gives him an element of sacrifice that redeems his character. However, for it not to feel hollow and labored, you’ll need a second “real” character to benefit from the MC’s sacrifice, otherwise, it was all for nothing. Could there be a victim he was planning on killing and as a result of his own sacrifice the victim lives?

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  3. Posted: November 6, 2017In:

    Trapped

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    CraigDGriffiths:This one has been haunting my brain for 10 days now. Which is a good sign, I guess, given the genre.I have some quibbles over terminology raised in the discussion thread. (Technically he suffers from a multiple personality disorder, not schizophrenia; the two aren't interchangeable).Read more

    CraigDGriffiths:

    This one has been haunting my brain for 10 days now. Which is a good sign, I guess, given the genre.

    I have some quibbles over terminology raised in the discussion thread. (Technically he suffers from a multiple personality disorder, not schizophrenia; the two aren’t interchangeable).? But that aside I think it’s an intriguing concept, definitely a film I am curious to see how the narrative keeps the character — and the audience — in the dark for most of the movie.

    In terms of how to phrase the logline, I am of a divided mind.? On the hand, the standard rule says never give away an important spoiler, specifically the Big Reveal, in a logline.? On the other hand, the most important must-have element in a logline is a good hook.? And in this story, the story hook is the Big Reveal — that it’s a conspiracy of multiple selves.

    So which element is more important?? I have concluded that this is a case where having a good story hook trumps the “no spoiler” rule.

    Best wishes with this story.? Hope to see it soon in a theater, or on a streaming service.

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