1. Posted: August 5, 2022In:

    A babysitter gets prank calls from a mysterious caller gets in a home invasion happens to be an child abductor who abused her in her childhood.

    Richiev Singularity

    You have been doing this long enough to know this one isn't up to snuff... Try another take, there is a story here. But the logline needs work.

    You have been doing this long enough to know this one isn’t up to snuff…
    Try another take, there is a story here. But the logline needs work.

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  2. Posted: July 31, 2022In:

    A young couple discovers a mysterious toy box that kills anyone who makes a wish.

    sabrown Penpusher

    I really like this premise but isn't there a movie like this called the Box? Or maybe Hellraiser?

    I really like this premise but isn’t there a movie like this called the Box? Or maybe Hellraiser?

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  3. Posted: July 15, 2022In:

    A Japanese American young woman discovers deadly recordings of her parents who died unexpectedly.

    NisVinten Logliner

    Exciting… but it’s like you need the action. How does the tapes/recordings turn her life around. What is her quest…? Maybe continue this: After finding deadly recordings of her parents who died unexpectedly a Japanese Amarican woman… For example - seeks revenge - learns things about her past that foRead more

    Exciting… but it’s like you need the action. How does the tapes/recordings turn her life around. What is her quest…?

    Maybe continue this:

    After finding deadly recordings of her parents who died unexpectedly a Japanese Amarican woman…

    For example
    – seeks revenge
    – learns things about her past that forces her to change her life for good
    – discovers the president it the next target and has 24 hours to save his life..
    – tries to escape herself being killed

    You see?

    Good luck! 🙂

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