1. Posted: May 9, 2021In:

    A proud father loses his Crop Dusting business after 09/11 shutdowns, and addiction threatens his dignity; his only redemption may cost him his life as stealing his repoed plane could do more than break the bank.

    Richiev Singularity

    Keep the logline to the main storyline: Also, you should add a face to the antagonist: When "This guy" shuts down his business, a crop duster and his wayward son must steal his plane from impound in order to stick it to the government and those who want to steal his freedom!"

    Keep the logline to the main storyline:
    Also, you should add a face to the antagonist:

    When “This guy” shuts down his business, a crop duster and his wayward son must steal his plane from impound in order to stick it to the government and those who want to steal his freedom!”

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  2. Posted: April 26, 2021In:

    After robbing. a casino in Vegas, A pair of prodigal biracial twin arrive in New York to start a new life but the trouble they lelf in VEgas didn’t stay in Vegas

    Seamoore Logliner

    Is biracial important because each sibling is on the far racial spectrum from each other? Otherwise, I don't believe it's relevant for the logline. lelf? VEgas? I have a lot of questions on how the two of them managed to rob a casino? Maybe leave that part out and find an alternative way to add to tRead more

    Is biracial important because each sibling is on the far racial spectrum from each other? Otherwise, I don’t believe it’s relevant for the logline. lelf? VEgas?

    I have a lot of questions on how the two of them managed to rob a casino? Maybe leave that part out and find an alternative way to add to the looming threat. Who specifically is after them?

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  3. Posted: May 4, 2021In:

    After losing her best friend in an abandoned building, a girl will have to find a way out before an old man forces her to face her greatest fear.

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    Odie Samurai

    Consider the following to strengthen your logline: 1. Why were they in this build? E.g., Urban explorers shooting their latest abandoned vid. 2. What’s the psychology of your protag? E.g., Claustrophobic, afraid of the dark, reckless? 3. Who is this old man? A “get off of my lawn” derelict? 4. WhatRead more

    Consider the following to strengthen your logline:
    1. Why were they in this build? E.g., Urban explorers shooting their latest abandoned vid.
    2. What’s the psychology of your protag? E.g., Claustrophobic, afraid of the dark, reckless?
    3. Who is this old man? A “get off of my lawn” derelict?
    4. What does “forces her to face her greatest fear” look like?

    Take care.

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