1. Posted: June 16, 2023In:

    When the identity of a missing girl is reported to be the niece of the head of the CCTV department, she must review the footage to uncover the mystery behind her niece’s disappearance.

    amandis98 Penpusher

    That she just must review the footage to figure out the mystery don't feel like a big enough "must". what are the stakes? what happens if she don't figure it out. if you can see it on the tapes the movie will be over very fast. just some thoughts.

    That she just must review the footage to figure out the mystery don’t feel like a big enough “must”. what are the stakes? what happens if she don’t figure it out. if you can see it on the tapes the movie will be over very fast. just some thoughts.

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  2. Posted: June 16, 2023In:

    When Katie’s distant father stays over to look after her, she must learn to reconnect with him in order to salvage their relationship.

    iiahere Penpusher

    Is there something in their way that might affect her goal?

    Is there something in their way that might affect her goal?

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  3. Posted: May 21, 2023In:

    When he goes to a urologist to get his erectile dysfunction treated, he learns that the doctor is the father of his girlfriend.

    djd2608 Penpusher

    You have an event but no action. What does the character do once he learns this information. What is his goal?

    You have an event but no action. What does the character do once he learns this information. What is his goal?

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