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In a future behind a glass dome, an optimistic factory girl discovers a strange seed and journeys across an inhospitable landscape to find a mythic Rover God who could bring the earth back to its former glory.
As mikepedley said.? If the discovery of the strange seed is the inciting incident, then there should be an obvious, clear-cut. cause-and-effect between that discovery and the decision to take the quest.? But the cause-and-effect relationship between the discovery and the quest is vague, tenuous atRead more
As mikepedley said.? If the discovery of the strange seed is the inciting incident, then there should be an obvious, clear-cut. cause-and-effect between that discovery and the decision to take the quest.? But the cause-and-effect relationship between the discovery and the quest is vague, tenuous at best.? We , the readers, are given no reason as to what is so special about the seed that that it motivates her to go on a quest? to find the “Rover God”.
Further, if the “Rover God” is that potent, and benevolent why doesn’t she just take the initiative and? regenerate the world?? Why must a factory girl ask her?
(Also it’s SOP in? any plot entailing a mere mortal wanting something from a deity that the deity will refuse to grant the mere mortal her wish — until she fulfills some seemingly impossible task or undergoes some perilous ordeal.)
See lessA pair of young lovers from rival lobster fishing gangs in Maine must unite their communities in order to defend their territories against the encroaching Canadian lobster mafia.
Beck:If I understand you rightly what is "inciting" the conflict now is warming ocean waters.? That should certainly factor into the story.? However, if the lobsters are migrating northward because of warming waters, then shouldn't the dramatic problem be American lobster men poaching in Canadian waRead more
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If I understand you rightly what is “inciting” the conflict now is warming ocean waters.? That should certainly factor into the story.? However, if the lobsters are migrating northward because of warming waters, then shouldn’t the dramatic problem be American lobster men poaching in Canadian waters and areas in international waters traditionally claimed and worked by Canadians??? IOW: who really are the designated “bad guys” in this scenario?? If the Canadians are, then what is motivating them to come south?? Seems like? the Americans wold be the group more negatively impacted by warming waters.
See lessAfter the die-hard romantic paramour of a married woman is asked to help kill her abusive stepfather, he plans the perfect murder but when he discovers she is using him as a pawn, heartbroken, he plots his revenge.
The twist should not be about "Plotting"Instead, it should happen quickly, and as a big reveal.The very trap that was supposed to "get" the husband is expertly turned around on the vengeful wife when it's revealed Her Paramour and Her husband are lovers.(Or the other way around. The husband convinciRead more
The twist should not be about “Plotting”
Instead, it should happen quickly, and as a big reveal.
The very trap that was supposed to “get” the husband is expertly turned around on the vengeful wife when it’s revealed Her Paramour and Her husband are lovers.
(Or the other way around. The husband convincing his lover to kill his wife only to be double-crossed by the lover and his wife at the end)
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