1. Posted: October 5, 2022In:

    After surviving cancer, a boxer comes out of retirement with the help of his coach.

    OKBoomer Penpusher

    Why does he come out of retirement? What does he desire? What is he risking?

    Why does he come out of retirement? What does he desire? What is he risking?

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  2. Posted: October 3, 2022In:

    A woman tries to engage with her dysfunctional biological family after she learns that her late loving and caring mother abducted her as a baby.

    Lotcher Samurai

    I like the premise but I feel like the logline might benefit by having the inciting incident (or so I assume) occur at the start of the logline. Here's an alternate logline for you consideration: "With the revelation that her late mother abducted her, a woman must confront an even harsher reality asRead more

    I like the premise but I feel like the logline might benefit by having the inciting incident (or so I assume) occur at the start of the logline.

    Here’s an alternate logline for you consideration:

    “With the revelation that her late mother abducted her, a woman must confront an even harsher reality as relations with her biological family rapidly deteriorate.”

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  3. Posted: October 5, 2022In:

    Young siblings have to use their very particular set of skills to counter bullying and alienation they’re experiencing after moving to a new country.

    BenGilani Logliner

    Hi pinang, I like your logline as it is. I believe you can make it even more appealing though by playing with the words. For example: "To counter bullying and alienation in the new country they've just relocated to, young siblings must use their very particular set of skills." I hope this helps GoodRead more

    Hi pinang,

    I like your logline as it is. I believe you can make it even more appealing though by playing with the words.
    For example:

    “To counter bullying and alienation in the new country they’ve just relocated to, young siblings must use their very particular set of skills.”

    I hope this helps
    Good Luck

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