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An wanderer and a space princess must stop an evil emperor from having their town by ecologists in order to protect the environment.
An wanderer and a space princess must stop an evil emperor from having their town by ecologists. ----- I believe the purpose of a logline isn't just to convey a story in a concise manner, but also to see if the writer can write one single compelling sentence. After all, a script or book is basicallyRead more
An wanderer and a space princess must stop an evil emperor from having their town by ecologists.
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I believe the purpose of a logline isn’t just to convey a story in a concise manner, but also to see if the writer can write one single compelling sentence.
After all, a script or book is basically a series of compelling sentences, that when strung together, tell an equally compelling story.
Therefore, before anything else, I would first make sure that your logline is the best sentence you can possibly write.
Anyway, just some thoughts, Hope this helped!
(BTW, I can’t tell from logline whether this is for the Edger Rice Burroughs story, ‘Princess of Mars’ or your own original story with the same name)
See lessAn earnest biology teacher struggles to stop the U.S. military from weaponizing a space-borne virus when his infected students show signs of telepathy.
That's an interesting idea, but what is the death stakes, Is the teacher afraid of someone noticing the student showing signs of telepathy? Or is the student using it to harm people or is the teacher afraid more people will begin to have this ability?
That’s an interesting idea, but what is the death stakes, Is the teacher afraid of someone noticing the student showing signs of telepathy? Or is the student using it to harm people or is the teacher afraid more people will begin to have this ability?
See lessIn a future where children must be raised by AI, the director of the largest AI firm risks arrest and death when she chooses to raise her infant son by herself.
I think you need something that forces her to make this decision. I don't see an event that triggers her to make this decision other than she just wants to. You need to show a reason for why she HAS TO raise her child rather than let the AI raise them. Maybe after giving birth she discovers a horribRead more
I think you need something that forces her to make this decision. I don’t see an event that triggers her to make this decision other than she just wants to. You need to show a reason for why she HAS TO raise her child rather than let the AI raise them. Maybe after giving birth she discovers a horrible truth about how the AI are raising the children and that makes her want to raise the child herself?
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