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A researcher hired by NASA to find a wormhole during an alien invasion.
Isn't it a little superfluous to say from outer space? Where else would an alien invasion come from? And why does he only have seven days to do it if he has a time machine? Or is there some limitation that only allows him to travel seven days into the past? I remember seeing a few episodes of a shorRead more
Isn’t it a little superfluous to say from outer space? Where else would an alien invasion come from?
And why does he only have seven days to do it if he has a time machine? Or is there some limitation that only allows him to travel seven days into the past? I remember seeing a few episodes of a short-lived TV show with the premise that they always sent him seven days into the past.
See lessA team of intrepid explorers develop the first faster than light drive to take humanity to the stars. The only thing in their way is humanity itself.
Okay...so what happens? How is humanity an obstacle in this story? What are the personal stakes for one or all of these intrepid folks? Loglines should be one sentence, and faster-than-light should be hyphenated in this context. Would the explorers really be the ones to develop the technology? Are tRead more
Okay…so what happens? How is humanity an obstacle in this story? What are the personal stakes for one or all of these intrepid folks?
Loglines should be one sentence, and faster-than-light should be hyphenated in this context.
Would the explorers really be the ones to develop the technology? Are they engineers and scientists in their spare time? This may seem like a minor thing to pick on but a logline with questionable logic means people are questioning aspects of the story rather than being intrigued by them. Also remember how terrible Fant4stic is, with those who build the thing deciding to be the ones who use it.
While this does successfully establish the genre, it doesn’t provide much in the way of the four main things it needs: protagonist, antagonist, conflict, stakes. One method of crafting a quality logline is to write a big long rambling run-on sentence summarizing all the necessary detail, then trim it down and juggle the phrasing until it’s packed with information but clear and succinct.
See lessREVISED: After WW III, a grieving journeyman electrician trapped in a secret underground AI lab, discovers two other survivors. Two arch enemies, both soliciting his help and holding the key to his escape, redemption and the future of humanity.
Hola! definitivamente me siento más cómodo con el segundo logline. En el primero no me quedaba claro la rivalidad de los sobrevivientes, que se aclara un poco, en el segundo. Dudas: por qué es valiente? por qué está atrapado? por qué tienen el futuro de la humanidad? Si no hacen al logline , quitaríRead more
Hola! definitivamente me siento más cómodo con el segundo logline. En el primero no me quedaba claro la rivalidad de los sobrevivientes, que se aclara un poco, en el segundo. Dudas: por qué es valiente? por qué está atrapado? por qué tienen el futuro de la humanidad? Si no hacen al logline , quitaría esas pistas. “Un hombre atrapado en un laboratorio sobrevive al Juicio Final; al tratar de salir descubre a otros dos sobrevivientes, enemigos entre sí. Deberá elegir en cual confiar, para salvar su vida.”
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