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When her adopted brother threatens a hostile takeover of the family business, a resentful cyborg must come out of hiding to stop him.
Oops, saying more about her includes her humanity. Like, "After being enhanced (as above, the robot part), a (the human part)..."
Oops, saying more about her includes her humanity. Like, “After being enhanced (as above, the robot part), a (the human part)…“
See lessA future Test-Pilot stranded at the fare side of the Galaxy trying to find a way home while solving the mystery of a black planet.
Normally the word 'Stranded' is a good word to use. If someone is 'stranded' on a desert island, we get a picture of the situation. But in the specific case of this logline, you need just a word or two more. I decided to think, off the top of my head, reasons why a pilot might be stranded. 1: His spRead more
Normally the word ‘Stranded‘ is a good word to use. If someone is ‘stranded‘ on a desert island, we get a picture of the situation.
But in the specific case of this logline, you need just a word or two more.
I decided to think, off the top of my head, reasons why a pilot might be stranded.
1: His spaceship ran out of fuel.
2: His spaceship broke down.
3: His spaceship blew up.
4: He was captured by aliens
5: The mysterious black planet interfered with the workings of his spaceship.
Since the mysterious black planet seems to be the hook of your story, I would go with number 4 and connect why he is stranded directly to the mysterious black planet.
See lessNow the lead must explore the black planet if he is to stop the interference and complete his goal of getting home.
Having spent their first fifteen years in an abusive home in Michigan, twins Jacob and Jenee discover that they were born in a different dimension. As they reunite with their birth family and rediscover their birthplace Pontint. Jacob and Jennee learn that they are the future of Pontint, and had been hidden away to protect them from the royal family who wants them killed.
I like Richiev's format, but your plot interests me more. I can imagine it playing across the feature length. I'd suggest you go for a singular protagonist. Below is one way to pan it out across the blake synder narrative beat paradigm:Setup: An abusive childhood on earth.Inciting Incident: DiscoverRead more
I like Richiev’s format, but your plot interests me more. I can imagine it playing across the feature length. I’d suggest you go for a singular protagonist. Below is one way to pan it out across the blake synder narrative beat paradigm:
Setup: An abusive childhood on earth.
Inciting Incident: Discovering she’s from an alternate dimension.
Break Into Two: The reunion with her people; discovering her birthplace.
1st half of Act 2: The political situation of their planet; what can she do about it? Is she different from the rest? which can lead us to..
Midpoint: She was hidden away in another dimension to protect her from the royal family who wants her killed; discovering her birthright??
2nd half of Act 2: The Royal Family closes in, and so on…
What’s more? You can still have a twin (which is interesting) and define the lead character. Suggested Inciting Incident:? “After his twin from an alternate dimension pays him a visit…”
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