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2112: the government is about to destroy a city?s ability for deep emotion, an outcast telepath must trade in her beloved, to rescue someone murdered in the past to start an uprising.
First of all, this needs help grammatically. Second, the phrase "must trade in her beloved" is too... simple? Like... she's either going to or not. And we assume she will. You're supposed to mention the GOAL of the main character, but in a way that's more about the struggle than just simple math, ifRead more
First of all, this needs help grammatically. Second, the phrase “must trade in her beloved” is too… simple? Like… she’s either going to or not. And we assume she will. You’re supposed to mention the GOAL of the main character, but in a way that’s more about the struggle than just simple math, if that makes sense. I’m guessing that’s a specific PART of her goal to “start an uprising”, just like “rescue someone murdered” (which doesn’t make sense, because you can resurrect someone who’s already murdered, but if they’re already murdered, you hardly succeeded in rescuing them). I think you could drop both specific phrases and just mention the true overall goal of “start an uprising” and see if that cleans it up.
See lessIn the distant future: When a naive teen joins the army, his over-protective biker brother must enlist, go through the harsh training, and find the boy so that he can get him out before they’re sent to battle against nightmarish aliens.
How is he going to "GET" him out? Otherwise, I basically dig it. And "overprotective" is fine as a motivation and flaw for a main character. We've all been there. Relatable enough! :-)
How is he going to “GET” him out? Otherwise, I basically dig it. And “overprotective” is fine as a motivation and flaw for a main character. We’ve all been there. Relatable enough! 🙂
See lessJesus Christ living under an alias is brutalized by two police officers and decides to fight back bringing him face to face with his estranged daughter a sergeant in SWAT. Their confrontation will decide whether humanity lives or dies.
The Belgium movie?The Brand New Testament (original French title Le tout nouveau testament)?is based on an equally provocative premise. It is a very good satirical comedy that despite its thought provoking and some may blasphematory is a heart warming movie with some fantastic acting. in this movie,Read more
The Belgium movie?The Brand New Testament (original French title Le tout nouveau testament)?is based on an equally provocative premise. It is a very good satirical comedy that despite its thought provoking and some may blasphematory is a heart warming movie with some fantastic acting.
in this movie, the protagonist is his God’s daughter and her goal is to save humanity.
Making that same change will make your logline more logical. Also by having a vulnerable protagonist, you introduce some kind of suspense making it more attractive. Otherwise it sounds like the all powerful being Jesus Christ is not happy and is going to kicks me butts. Who us going to stop him? Nobody can. End of.
Strange premise can make very good science-fiction movie, but the premise must be written in a coherent fashion and not turn into a gimmick. Jesus Christ is a badass run the risk of turning into gimmickry and ridicule.
A good example of science-fiction movie based on a weird premise is the?French movie?A mere mortal (original French title Simple mortel). When a linguist specialised in dead language starts receiving coded messages he must fulfil increasingly difficult missions to save humanity. In the movie the entire humanity is at risk but with an unlikely protagonist. It has no special effect and starts as a mundane slice of French life before veering toward the weird thriller.
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